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Fluttershy wakes up on a day like any other, ready to tackle life, but life has other plans. Somehow, while Fluttershy slept, every single other pony in Equestria disappeared. Now she has to try to fix things, all while learning how to live in an empty world.
At least, she thinks it's empty. That might not be so true, though.
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This story intrigues me. I'll keep track of it! Good work so far!
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Thanks! ^w^ Hopefully it doesn't disappoint.
Love these types of stories so I'll read this
Empty farms is a big nope to me
Interesting start! I'll put this on my watchlist
As a side note though, the first chapter seems a little too long. Like, there's a lot of unimportant stuff that could be cut from it, and it drags the story out longer than it should be in the introduction.
Also, when did your descriptions get so good? Those parts in the beginning were fricking beautiful!
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Yea I can see where you're comin from about the length. One of my biggest weaknesses has always been and will always be how long-winded I am.
& thanks for the compliment! ^w^ I've been puttin a lotta work into this story (I wanted to finish the rough draft before publishing any chapters so I wouldn't feel pressured into writing faster than I should) and as it turns out, writing a story with almost no dialogue ends up giving you a lot of practice with describing things. Whoda thunk it.
It's helped, though. I honestly feel really good about this story. Here's hopin other people end up agreeing.
....but will it really?
This is so good! I eagerly await the next update!
That's a pretty compelling {and disturbing} portrayal of isolation, especially in a maze. Looking forward to seeing more.
A conundrum, though... it was day, then night, then morning. Who moved the sun and the moon? A mystery to be explored later?
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Thanks for the compliment! ^w^ Glad you're likin the story. It's a weird place Fluttershy has found herself in.
Whoa what just happen
The mystery in this story just keeps getting stranger, and yet more intriguing with each chapter.
I'm getting a horror vibe, but also a bit of thrills. I can feel Fluttershy's loneliness, and it creeps me out a bit. Great writing!
Woah. What is going on?
How is the Sun and Moon still moving?
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I'm starting to suspect time shenanigans. I'm also wondering if the writer of the note turned out to be Fluttershy as well.
But that's just a gut feel.
Although here's a question... if Ponyville has been abandoned - or something - for fifteen years, would there be structural decay? Or am I nitpicking too much?
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I guess there would still be some sort of weathering? Does weathering happen in equestria, I mean the ponies do everything else. Idk it's one of those things that like. I could come up with a reason for it if I really wanted to, but I just don't feel like it's necessary for Fluttershy to go out of her way in the middle of a chapter to investigate the structural integrity of ponyville, yknow? Same thing with like. The movement of the sun. I know how I would explain it, I just don't feel like it fits in the story as-is.
Makes me think of a situation where one pony is all alone in the world and can't see anybody but others can see 'hem but not hear 'hem.
Hmm... so we have a name.
needs more questioning. "You don't want me to call you Rainbow Dash, then tell me why,"
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Well, I imagine the whole tiredness and pain from a broken leg might be affecting her thought processes. We tend to be a lot less analytical than we'd like to be when under stress.
Hmm
Man, I need to start o er again to understand what is going on
Ya know. I first found this story looking for horror fanfictions, but man am I glad I found this. This was a nice little read for each day it came out, and I loved the sci-fi aspect of it all. Thank you for writing this. ;3
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Aw, thank you! ^w^ I'm glad you enjoyed it.
It's funny, actually, I keep intending to write a horror story, but then these ideas I have that seem perfect for it end up just not being horror. Iunno, maybe one of these days I'll try writin an adventure story and come away with horror.
Sheesh, Twilight, aren't there, like, rules of spell safety? I mean, there's "mistakes were made" and there's this.
This was a very good story to read. I really like how in-character you made Fluttershy as well, and the atmosphere was gripping to say the least, and the resolution was, well.. realistic. We can't always get what we want, no matter how much we want it.
There's some questions unanswered, unless I missed them {a definite possibility given I've read this over the course of several months}, but that certainly doesn't detract from the story - it may even enhance it.
Overall, good job.
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Thank you! :3 I'm always so glad when people like my writing. The compliments mean a ton to me.
I honestly deliberated a lot over exactly how much I wanted to answer regarding Dusty's past. In the earliest versions, there was the old messages in the basement and that was it. I like mysteries. But I decided against that in the end, figured that little would be unsatisfying.
It's tough knowing exactly how clear things are, too. Cuz like, I knew all the details of the pre-fluttershy stuff already. It makes it hard to find a balance between frustrating vagueness and bland exposition.
But yea, I'm glad you enjoyed it! ^w^