Everything is fine in Ponyville with Twilight and her best friends. But all of that changes when a new pony comes to town not wanting to socialize with other ponies or creatures. As Twilight and her friends try to befriend her, they discover that she's not a normal pony. She's a hybrid pony born in a lab and has a dangerous future ahead of her.
Twilight and her friends will have to help her come out of her shell and trust them if they want to help her. And they'll have to keep her safe from the forces who want her for their own purposes while helping her unlock the abilities she was given.
Man, httyd is getting popular lately, and I hope it'll continue for a long time. Also, some words in the first chapter are in wrong places or shouldn't be there.
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Okay I'll look over it
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Fixed it
9767412
Fixed it
"Hybrid" is not an uncountable term like "friendship" is.
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Eh, try something new
I see improvement, but there's going to be confusion about the stallions that it didn't say what race the first one is while it did say "the other unicorn" for the second one. You should fix that.
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Fixed it
You don't have to insert pictures of characters/things/locations if you've already described them.
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Okay.
Shouldn't the Mane Six realize by now that not everyone wants to be friends and that pushing to be friends with someone who isn't very social is just going to drive them further away? ...Sorry, it's just a pet peeve of mine.
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I have the Mane 6 helping Jasira into their society, helping her get comfortable with other ponies including themselves.
Fucking called it
Will there be a sequel?
Isn't the light fury named snow?
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Snowflake or Snow (nickname)
You leave the name problem respond to it but purge the things wrong with the story? nice to know bad author confirmed good day waiting for you to purge this as well
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don't care
More good