Sunset Shimmer shouldn't be here. She knows that and Twilight Sparkle knows that, but the latter won't admit it, resorting to ancient, dark magic to make life fair. Sunset must make Twilight see how much she is hurting herself by refusing to let Sunset Shimmer go and move on.
An entry into Oroboro's Sunset Shipping Contest: Endings.
Cover art revised by the generous and awesome Shortmane.
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Nice work
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed.
Oh Twilight. I doubt Sunset would have wanted you to kill yourself over her. Even if she's gone, some day you'll meet again. If not in this life, then the next.
So which one is actually dead? Or are they both dead? You make it sound like Twilight is as well as Sunset.
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Sunset is dead. Sorry if it was unclear; was trying to show how bad a spot Twilight is in between trying to reject reality and be on the edge of wanting to just end things, while the Sunset she made tries to make her accept reality and live in it.
I actually like this
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Thank you. ^_^
Really liked it!
An entry worth their(?) feels. 💛❤💜
Hope you'll go far with it, you deserve it.
This was a fun fic! I meant it when I said it might be my favorite in the contest (although there's some good competition).
It's an interesting idea and I could see Twilight doing something crazy like that in her grief, and that Sunset would be the one to try and knock her out of it. The little moment at the end where Twilight is letting go and then stops felt so in-character and real, it was a nice touch.
My one suggestion/criticism: you don't need to physically describe the characters in the beginning, everyone who's reading it will know what Twilight looks like (unless there's something unusual... like a constantly glowing horn). Especially in the beginning, it might throw off some readers.
The dynamic and dialogue was sweet and believable, and that's even weirder because it's not Sunset but an apparition of her, and had that nice distinction of feeling so much like Sunset, but just that little bit different.
Cool concept, nice fic, and good luck in the contest!
Holy fuck.
What a twist! I didn’t expect for the narrative to change a complete 180! At first, I expected something outside the context of Sunset and Twilight, probably them trying to crack the Memory Stone problem or something.
Nope. The marriage part pointed it slightly.
Such a banger!
Okay that was very sad. I hope Illusion Sunset gets a proper afterlife too or at least lives on as part of somepony else.
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Thank you for the compliment! I'm glad people enjoyed this story and got something out of it. That is enough for me even if I'm dead last.
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Thank you for the encouraging words and the healthy criticism to improve in the future. You've been a great help in how much you liked this story and in improving the title art.
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I'm glad my story gave you quite a ride! I definitely wanted it to have a surprising feel in where it was going while still planting just enough seeds to take note. I'm glad I succeeded there.
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Thank you for reading and for wanting the best for Illusion Sunset after the end.
Holy sheep, that twist! I thought it would be something like Sunset wanting to go back to the human world, but you killed her