Epilogue
It's been 2 weeks since Spike was released from the hospital after his molting incident, and all the girls were surprised that he had not gone back in. With Rainbow teaching Spike how to fly like her, Spike had crashed so many times that the town's fields had become like the moon itself. So to make sure that Spike was ok, and that the mayor didn't get too upset with all the holes, it was decided that Spike would walk around town, until he had better control. But right now that was the least of the town's concerns, and it all started 3 days ago.
Three days ago, Spike, got a letter from Celestia, but oddly enough it was to delivered to Mayor Mare. So Spike being Spike, took it to the mayor in town hall, and after giving Raven a smile, she waved him into the office. Mayor Mare was sitting at her desk going over some expense reports for new buildings that were being built in town, the repairs for a dam in her jurisdiction, and the outrageous number of parties that Pinkie had planned in the coming weeks. "I swear that mare is only going to stop when she transforms the world so everything is made of icing." She had almost 30 parties or events planned and she needed Mayor Mare so sign off on them to make sure that she could rally the town into song if needed.
Spike laughed as he looked over the request. "Sorry about her Mayor, I know Mama can be a little over prepared."
"It's fine Spike, but would you kindly not look over my shoulder, I know this is from you and her, but I do have other documents that are not for the eyes of a certain little dragon." She pressed her hoof against his nose and pushed him away.
"Sorry, but do you have a moment?"
Mayor Mare nodded. "Of course Spike, unless your here to tell me you made another crater in the field, then I would like you to leave."
Spike started laughing. "Sorry, not today, Mom, and Mommy made that very clear, no more tricks."
"Thank Celestia." Said the mare. "Now what can I do for the town dragon?"
Spike showed the letter he got from Celestia. "Grandma Celestia sent me this, I think she wanted me to give it to you."
She took the letter from Spike and it was indeed addressed to her office, with the royal seal and everything that was needed to make this official. She broke the royal seal and unrolled the paper. But sitting inside of the paper was another note, but this one was addressed to Spike. "Hold on Spike, this one is for you." Spike took his note and started to read it.
Dear Spike.
If you are reading this, that means that you have delivered the letter to Mayor Mare. Let her read her letter first, it will help you understand what I want you to do.
Spike looked at the mayor. "Ok, she seems to want you to go first."
Mayor Mare shrugged as she read her message.
To Mayor Mare of Ponyville.
This is a formal notification, that I, Princess Celestia of Equestria, have decided to grace your town with my presence and to hold the yearly Summer Sun Celebration in your town. Following this notification is a series of tasks that are needed to accomplished, please choose those you believe would be best for the job.
Refreshments,
Music,
Decorations,
Weather.Please note that I will be sending a trusted advisor to oversee the final lookover of these tasks.
From the desk of her royal highness, Princess Celestia of Equestria.
"Ok, I already have an idea on who can do all of that, but lets see what yours says." Said Mayor.
Spike nodded as he skipped the first part.
Ok, Spike, now that the boring formal request is done, I want you to get Fluttershy to get some of her bird friends to help with the music. See if you can get your Mom off her napping cloud to clear the weather, but don't be too mean if she is napping. I trust Rarity's artistic eye to do the decorations. And if you can swing it, see if the Apples could do the treats, I already went through last years Zap Apple Jam, and I really want some apple fritters, but see if Pinkie and the Cakes would like to help. This trusted advisor is Twilight and her friends, I know that the last time you saw them it was a very odd time, but could you please show them around the town as well? I have already made arrangements for them to reside in the Ponyville Library, Golden Oaks. Lastly, I want you to come see me before the event, I have something important to tell you. Love you Spike.
From Grandma.
Spike looked at Mayor Mare as she looked at him. "Well, I guess great minds think alike. I was going to ask them to do the same jobs as she wanted. But who is this Twilight pony?"
"Right, you weren't part of that. She is just the mare that hatched my egg, but to avoid a war or something, Grandma, wanted to send me to live with my own kind, but some guard she asked to take me, decided to leave me in the Everfree, where Mamas found me."
"Wow, I was expecting a little more anger in that statement."
"Why, I love my Mamas, and I don't care if Twilight was the one who hatched me, I'm happy here."
"Very good, well, I still have many things to do, why don't you go inform your mothers about their jobs and get ready for her visit?"
Spike nodded as he walked over to the door. "Have a good day Mayor."
She nodded at Spike. "The same to you Spike." Spike closed the door and Mayor Mare sighed. "Why do I have a feeling my job is going to be really hard soon?"
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Ish there a sequel?
So, what now?
Excellent job on this epilogue/sequel set-up. Absolutely adored Spike's chat with Mayor Mare during the preparations while reading Celestia's "advance warning note". REALLY looking forward to seeing Spike showing Twilight and the others around Ponyville.
Sweet cap-off to the beginning of the series there with that last letter, thanks again for such an adorable & sweet Spike story!
Looking forward to the sequel when it comes out, take care!
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I sure hope so. There are so many possibilities for a sequel.
Spike you life has once again just begun
so.............. what now?? is there more???? i would like to read more please.
Just felt a little rush, it didn't really have a proper ending to it but it was so great to have an epilogue and to see what is going to happen when it's time to introduce the main story Into the series. Great job with this story oh, I'm so glad I binge read the hell out of it just to get to the end
To ensure everybody crosses over since some are probably just following the book and not you it may be a good idea to post a note leading people to the sequel when it comes out
Ok wow I was kind of expecting a long story but it's OK I really injoy your au story of spike And I really do appreciate hope every pony really respect spike their and i hope to see more of this or whenever but keep up the good work 😊
i hope you are doing a sequel
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who knows.......besides the author of course
Well done TAD2, well done.
Noice! Think you could post a notice-chapter that says when the sequel will be up?
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True that I learned that a long time ago 😅
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thank your my broda (sisda)!!!!!
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No. It was when Rodney and Fender arrived at Bigweld Industries.
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where is your information coming from? I've researched this and canon actually states that Limestone is oldest. Maud is second born, followed by Pinkie and Marble. The information I've found comes from The elements of Harmony vol 2 guidebook.
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ok then.
Apologies in advance for this massive comment since I'm just kinda reviewing the whole story.
The story is built off of an interesting premise which you handled passably. The five members of the future Mane 6 raising Spike as kids is interesting and the fact he acquires some of their personality quirks is nice as well. Even the 4th Wall Breaking is fine, but remember to limit that because what makes the 4th Wall Break funny (or scary but that's for a different tone of story) is that the reader doesn't expect it, and as soon as it comes it goes.
The few conflicts he gets into also make sense. That said I feel like you took how his presence changes things around him to an extreme which just removes any future conflict he could have had (between the Apple parents not getting axed off because the problem that would lead to their death gets noticed and Spoiled being removed early, there are a a few hardships from growing up that he simply didn't truly experience at least as far as we could see).
There were some potential ways this story could have gone that I expected it to go but it just never really happened. I thought the story MIGHT be about the girls secretly raising Spike while keeping him out of the spotlight as much as possible because "OH NO, A DRAGON", or because Celestia comes looking for him and they don't instantly trust her with his location because they're sure she's going to send him away.
Other than how some things just stop being problems magically and he never deals with anything significant, the story is very good with its premise, but I think you made one big misstep. You may not appreciate this, but I don't hate Swift, I feel sorry for him and feel like his role in the story is a total waste of potential that you could have done so much with but didn't.
A direction I had expected this story to go in was Swift being given the ultimatum to find Spike and do his damn job or he'll be at a desk forever or in prison for dereliction. Instead he's given a bizarre treatment where he is said to have done so many other things and then given the Tartarus for life sentence. I understand you want me to hate him... but I don't. Not nearly as much as you want me to at least.
Yes, I think he's a coward, but cowardice alone does not make someone a villain (especially since most ponies meeting Spike, such as fellow guard Solid Earth, are like "SWEET CELESTIA A DRAGON" so there's apparently a reason to be scared of dragons). Instead you tried to force the hatred of him through actions made off-screen that are merely listed off, and then go on to have the interaction with Tirek where he's declared the worst ever (TM) and just have him show up as a punchline in random bits while saying in the author notes "LET THE HATE FESTER". But... I don't hate him, and I can't because despite your efforts he's just a wimp rather than EVIL.
Take away the stuff we're told he's also done, he's just a coward, not a bastard. If you wanted to make him a bastard then you could have had him being shown doing worse things before his assignment, and then he could have started hunting for Spike while keeping Celestia in the dark so he can "tie off the loose end". THAT would have made him a villain to hate. Instead, he just looks like a coward who could use a redemption arc being treated as literally worse than Pony Satan - which is something that could have REALLY worked for this story: an interesting outcome for all this would for he and Spike to finally come face to face and Spike having to figure out how much he really hates the guy since if he hadn't been a coward, Spike would never have met his mothers. Never have been raised by them. Maybe his actions wouldn't be totally forgiven but a foundation could be laid out for Swift to change for the better and grow out of his cowardice, but instead he's Literally Worse Than Tirek according to the story and it just feels wasted.
That whole thing aside, as I try to think about this story I'm realizing that he does a lot with Applejack, Fluttershy, Rarity, and Pinkie Pie. I can't recall any moments, whole chapters or otherwise, truly devoted to his relationship with Rainbow Dash outside of introducing her parents. I might just not be remembering, do refresh me if that's the case.
Above all though thank you for not having a scene of him getting changed. Such scenes tend to be creepy and weird, and you didn't go for it. Thank you so damn much.
Overall: nice story, misses the mark a bit, but still works with the good premise.
Ok, so spikes full name is a mouth full
I find the story truly fantastic.
Oh, Spiky-Wikey.
It was so fun. Definitely recommended!