At a certain age, fame loses most of its power as a motivational force. Cold, hard cash on the other hoof...
A pegasus attempts a dangerous record-breaking flight.
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iisaw
Having fun by taking silly cartoon ponies way too seriously.
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That was some good stuff! I really like how you sell the adventure-y type setting before the flight. Makes it feel like something out of a James Bond or Indiana Jones movie with exotic locations. A great short little read!
Oh, I did notice a little typo!
It was Cluttebuck's turn to display a smug smile. "He just wants you to feel at home. Canterlot types are used to ostentatious luxury, right?"
You joke, but under the World As Myth the two words are redundant.
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Thanks; fix'd!
Good stuff. Your writing keeps the pace well even if the plot doesn't quite take the reader over the moon.
Well, the deal was from Zebrica to Equestria. No stipulations on where in Equestria.
Based on Alcock and Brown? Some similarities, but I'm not sure there are enough; it might be something else I'm not thinking of.
Fun just on its own, though!
I do love Clutterbuck's trouble rant crashing and burning when met with Rainbow Dash.
... I've been in this fandom for over eight years, and that pun only now occurred to me.
A Bearer of Harmony. This is a typical Tuesday for her.
Fascinating little story. I do love how the girls can radically alter lives just because someone had the (mis)fortune to catch their interest. By the time Twilight took the throne, they were almost like powerful fey beings, shaking the world with every hoofstep and not always appreciating the impact they could have. (Actually, coming to realize that could make for an intriguing story in and of itself...) Thank you for this.
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Beryl Markham, whose actual, for-real, no kidding maiden name was Clutterbuck!
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Changing the world just by walking into a room.
I realize the exposition could have broken the flow of the story but why was having a bunch of airships along the route chosen over just one keeping pace with her? I didn’t get the impression she was going so fast that one couldn’t keep up.
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[wikis]
Oh, cool! Thanks! :D
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She was going much faster than an airship could manage.
Very cool story! I liked that Dash found herself a match and was able to challenge her to do something audacious.
Thought it was Wrong-Way Corrigan there for a bit. (Pegasi may have to worry about icing too, but not puddles of gasoline on the floor.)
Nice!
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Well I learned something new today!
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Nope! It's my tribute to the amazing Beryl Markham.
This is a really cool story! I love your writing style!
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Thank you!
It's very rare for me to have so incredibly little to say about a story and yet still be entertained perfectly well by it. It's very economical and it just works.
This is a really good story, so to properly evaluate it, bear with me while I say the worst aspect of it: It's too short! You're telling a story that's epic in scope, yet the second half where the flight takes place feels overly-summarised. It feels like a reflection after the fact rather than following Clutterbuck in the moment. If this had been a couple thousand words longer, you could have elaborated on some details of Clutterbuck's flight, and even add a couple of extra hazards here and there.
That said, it should be noted that when my primary critique is that I want to see *more* of it? That shows you have talent as a writer, getting me invested in this character and wanting to see how she succeeds with her skills. Endurance flight is something rarely portrayed, and I loved the detail of the "slam dunk" manoeuvre for de-icing.
I look forward to seeing more from this character, as she has the right balance between humility and self-confidence. I'd love to see a sequel where she feels the the fallout from her failed flight and maybe detailing her road to recovery.
Overall, I'd give this fic 8.2/10. A little underused potential, but you can take this higher!
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Thanks for the mini-review!
If I get to my Daring Do story (which needs a massive rewrite due to being jossed hard by the show), Clutterbuck will be a supporting character!
Clutterbuck and I know what it is like to be broken:
A red-light runner hit me on 12010-11-23. I just got back home yesterday.
It is a nice story.
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Holy carp, dude! I'm so sorry to hear that. I hope you'll mend quickly.
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I should walk again in January (technically, I could hypothetically walk again on 25th of November, the day after surgery, but I do not want to permanently mess up my bones). My left arm and right leg are nonweightbearing. I had 6 hours of surgery for my left arm and right leg. Technically, the left leg is weightbearing, but it has blown ligaments in the knee, so is unstable even with a kneebrace.
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I've been there, too. Not quite as bad... well, different, at least. Listen to your doctors and therapists, and good luck!
Any landing you can
walk away frombe airlifted from by a specialist weather team is a good one.translunar injection burn
first thing that came to my mind was a apollo era orbital maneuver
At first glance at the title I was thinking that this story would have something to do with the moon, but a historically based aviation story is equally as cool. A little on the short side but that's my only nitpick. What I am saying is that I hope you write more about Clutterbuck.