[Art and story made by me, Canvas Shade; a.k.a KobaltRein]
Canvas Shade is a unicorn with a sharp eye for detail and insatiable passion for art, literature, and history. One night, on the way home from getting drawing supplies, he encounters a lone, furious female dragon. Determined to make a difference, Canvas does the unthinkable: traversing Equestria to help her find her missing eggs. Along the way, the art pony encounters the Mane Six, earth pony crime lords, love, and even the female’s aggressive former mate!
Chapters (6)
The second half of the chapter is italicized. I've spotted a {/i somewhere.
i'm really liking this so far. i'm glad u added that Nyvena has feathered wings, which some dragons actually have. keep it up my good sir!
1115206 Thanks for spotting it--I'll give that a quick fix (I'm still new to how the site works)
Just to let everypony know, Don't call him Canvas Shade, Call him Coffee!
Also, as I promised I said I would read the story once you posted, it is officially in my Read Later list (Which I shall clean out today!)
1115740 Eh, call me whatever works for you, lol. And I'm glad you'll be getting to read it soon!
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Seriously, everpony call him Coffee!
and to all that are curious, yes that is me in his picture.
But honestly, congrats! Ill get off your comments until I get useful and read it!
Hey this is pretty good!
Interesting.... Really looking forward to more!
The present tense is distracting, but I like the story itself. Proceed.
1116644 Sorry that the tense is distracting--I tend to write like that by default. However, I will try other styles for future stories that I write
a fair premise, and a pretty well executed intro. Alright, i'm interested.
1115848 Why coffee?
Good story, can't wait for more, specifically, the part about the former mate
That's going to end soooo well
1121188 When Coffee first drew his pony self, it looked like he had been drinking Coffee for three weeks straight, and the color reminded me of the color of certain Coffee Drinks. Than i started calling him Coffee,when he said he hated Coffee (the drink), it just stuck. Personally, when it comes to Coffee; hate the drink, love the pony! (in the brotherly way)
D'awww. Not bad for a second entry. The scenario is not only adventure story but it's a beat the clock scenario(where Party-A needs to stop Party B from committing an act in a certain before a given time). You set up characters, motivations, you give Canvas some level of relatability to Nyvena, you give the reader a bit of action and the tiniest beginning of the shipping portion of the story.
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I look forward to more of the fic.
Peace Out.
LOVE IT!
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that is all.
Another decently written chapter, i've got to say, this story seems to be shaping up pretty well
1164132 The feedback is much appreciated! If there is anything needing to be fixed that stands out to you, then I will do my best to fix it and keep that in mind for future installments!
Well I enjoyed it, but I felt like it could have been better. I felt like some of the actions were just a bit to rushed, were not entirely believable, or could have been presented better.
But that's mostly just me being picky. I'll keep an eye on this as it looks very promising. Good luck.
1164703 Thanks for reading my story and letting me know of this; the reason it may seem kind of rushed is because I tend to write exposition that way, but it should be easier for me to lengthen certain parts as they progress. I'll try to make the actions more in-depth for future installments!
8000 word chapter in seven days? damn, you're proficient.
1213272 Thanks! I like to push myself to new heights when it comes to writing
I'll be watching this with interest - seems like it could turn out to be quite the wild ride. Not that it's been tame or anything up to this point.
You sir... Write some awesome stuffs. I look forward to seeing how this goes. Oh, and The Triumvirate? Awesome idea.
I likey this story. Keep up the good work!
1242385 *salutes* Aye, aye Reader!
All right THIS sounds like a good story! There's a certain kind of fanfiction that doesn't take any unnecessary departures from the canon. Stories that could very well be told in an episode (with SOME liberties taken) and they wouldn't feel out of place. The stories that do aren't always bad, but they make these stories ironically unique! I shall save this tale for later.
Proper good job, keep it coming :)
I did rather enjoy Nyvena's overly violent threats, because for the timing, execution and the fact that she stays in character as a carnivore. The pacing of the shipping is also very nicely handled in this story; it goes from unease and simple companionship with a hint of mistrust, then while there is still some unease, trust is now being built and now there is a spark of shipping. Nyvena and Canvas work well to together. She's bitter, sarcastic, violent apex predator who deep down has a heart of gold and is slowly opening up to a creature that would normally be considered a hindrance or prey. He's a crazy, somewhat optimistic unicorn who looking for adventure. Nyvena and Canvas are both constantly surprised by the other's abilities and actions. You get a since that things are changing for both of our protagonists.
Since Nyvena is going to meet the main six, I do question what will happen when she meets Spike, a dragon raised by ponies (a unicorn to be specific). I imagine a little confusion and d'awww with a dash of Nyvena's violent tendencies. Who knows, it might open things more for our main characters.
1291358 Ah, how I love character analyses like these! Yes, a lot of consideration has gone into the pacing of how the protagonists' symbiosis develops. I don't want to give away any spoilers, but Nyvena will encounter Spike for sure. I wouldn't really call them 'hijinks,' but interesting things will definitely ensue!
Would've replied early, but it didn't happen...
But yes, this is a great update to this story. I'm slowly seeing the relationship between Nyvena and Canvs change, and it's changing in a good way, with good pacing. None of the "ermehgeerd, this is happening for no reason" that seems to be cropping up more and more
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Sorry if I haven't said anything that hasn't already been said, just wanted to put in my two-bits.
Quite excellent. I can't wait to see how the first foray into Ponyville will be. Should be interesting.
*looks at views, then back to story* Where's the justice? How does a fic this good get so few views? It's just not right damnit! You should really try putting this in a group or something, it deserves a heck of a lot more attention.
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Dunno. Look at the first chapter though.
I think it might be due in part to the time of the post...
1318008 Wow, I didn't realize that until now. A quick edit should get it to a more proper date. I first posted it around 21 August, but it apparently changed the date when I edited.
1318008 good point, you either get the reader hooked at the start, or you don't get them hooked at all. still, it's a cracking peice of work.
1318365 I've put that into consideration, and I was thinking of re-releasing the first chapter to be in past tense like the rest of the story. It'll give me a chance to also iron out whatever mistakes I happened to miss, and to give it a much better title!
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I meant when you posted it today. You know, the difference in time zones and what not?
1319802 Ahhh, yeah. Unfortunately, my connection works terribly (if at all) in the daytime during heavy use. But I'll try to use some other computer if I have to, if it means I can get to post at a better time.
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I was referring to the number of views at the given time of day in response to airbornesquid's comment. But now that I look at the other chapters, I don't really understand why the story isn't being read. It's a good story that actually allows development instead of going right into action scenes every chapter.
And I wouldn't worry about your internet connection, good readers can wait to read something instead of scrolling to the bottom to say "first."
Someone's got anger issues... :D
Great update as always!
One thing real quick
There's a bbcode that's just there.
Moving on. Lots of twists and surprises in this one. Plenty of stuff to make people wonder for times to come.
Great Update Canvas! Worth the wait.
1733771 Thanks for catching that!
Will be fixed right away!
Brilliant! A nice, meaty, well written chapter to dig my teeth into. It's quite refreshing to see an author put such time and care into their work. I'm already foaming at the mouth for the next chapter.
1115544 Holy book worms this is a long fic isn't it i'm gonna have to get a free day and start reading it. I'm cursed with a love to read but i read very slowly.
1735730 Ah, same here! My mind has trouble focusing, even on things I'm interested in. But I'm glad I got to power through this story, and it's an honor that you'd take time out of your day to read something I wrote. There is no feeling like it to me as a writer. 'Thank you for taking interest in my story' just doesn't cut it here
Me likey this chapter. I'm a bit surprised that everypony moved except for Dash and Twilight. I would have thought Applejack would have stayed as well.
1736501 dude i haven't started yet I've been writing and proof reading. read my first story yet? it has some errors in it i think so point them out if you read it.
1738488 Sure, I'll give your story a look!
1738936 thanks bro
1739939 No problem--I'm happy to help!