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Jade Ring
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I would laugh if there was an alternate ending, or a continuation, where it was revealed that it was a huge misunderstanding between Shining and Cadence. However, the author can correct me on this if I am wrong but, it sounds like, with what Shining saw, text wise, it is impossible for this to be just a misunderstanding.
I agree, some kind of sequel is necessary to satisfy the curiosity of the outcome.
You should do a sequel with Vinyl called “White on White on White” then one with Celestia called “White on White on White on White.”
As you can see I am a man of culture.
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I wonder if something like this has been done before... Oh wait.
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XD
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Holy shit. I had no idea that existed. This is amazing.
Great story! A sequel would be great featuring the two!
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I haven't read it yet, but goddammit that is a perfect title.
There should be a human tag. Other than that, It's great.
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Whoops. Thought I missed something.
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This deserves a sequel, to see how things will end up, what really happened, what shining will do, with did they do in vacation, to see how rarity and shining meet secretly for weeks or months until twilight and friends inevitably discover them XD, this could be 0a good story :D, or it could just end here leaving us in suspense and wondering ¬¬.
I'll be honest, I'd love to see a series come out of this. Blue on White, Yellow on White, etc. This was a super hot read though.
~SolidFire
I'm not usually one for breaking up canon couples, but this was some quality drama and sex. And a very nice ambiguous ending. Great work!
Tags: Drama, Rarity
Why do you use the same one twice?
Wow, simply amazing, I love it! A very odd pairing, but makes sense Rarity could be attracted to him, and even if Shining is a loyal boyfriend (despite being cheated), I think that having a crush with one of his sister's friends is plausible. Rarity's personality is spot on and really she sounds very hot when she curses, and her rules and body concerns are very Rarity. Shining is fine, he behaves like a gentleman, asking even for her consent, confirming her age and treating her like a princess until he lost his mind for her. The sex part was amazing and very well narrated, too much chemistry with those two. The Twilight intervention was funny and yeah, her big bro knows well his sister's crazes. The best part, in my opinion, is when they doing it pressured in a limit time, she teasing him with Cadance and he spanking her and being rude, she accepting pull on her hair and letting him finish in her face was very pleasing and exciting.
Really amazing story and pretty hot stuff right here. Congratulation and thank you for writing it and sharing it.
Greetings.
Sequel?
if you don't mind.
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I might have an idea...
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Can't wait!
I hope for a continuation or a sequel, that was a really great read. The way you write makes them have great chemistry together. Thumbs up! I’ll be following for more.
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------ Review ------
Please keep in mind, I know I can be overly critical and negative at times. I can always find something to nitpick, even in the greatest works of literature ever written. Please don't take it personally!
-Truly magnificent, one of the best I've ever read.
-I can't find much to complain about in this one.
-Maybe the dirty talk came a little bit out of nowhere? A bit more of a gradual buildup to it might have been good.
-Very nice touch with Rarity's white-on white bikini and him thinking she was nude at first.
-Overall, excellent use of nudity and clothing in this story.
-Rarity's longstanding crush on him might have been a tad overplayed? It’s kind of something we’re told to justify what she’s doing, but we don’t get to actually see much of it.
-The unremarkable cover image probably to blame for this fic not being 10x more popular.
------ Scores ------
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Cloppability: 98/100
Allure: 90/100
Enticement: 97/100
Immersion: 93/100
Prose Quality: 96/100
Total Score: 474/500
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One thing I feel obliged to point out/ask. I always thought that flushing like that diverted the cold water, leaving the hot in the shower. Making the danger scalding, not freezing. I realize the difference is mostly academic, and cold water has a more humorous effect, but it still sticks out for me.
Is it missing a paragraph here? The change in attitude is kind of too sudden.
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It's a sudden moment. I wanted the readers to be as surprised as Shining Armor was at his actions.
Okay, just got around to reading this, and it's indeed super hot, even if it's a little more dramatic than my usual smutfic prefs, not to mention a ship that I've never really paid much attention to.
But still! A sequel in the 'Shining Armor fucks Twilight's Friends-iverse' would be entirely too fun. Keep up the good work!
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Congrats on winning the contest! I feel nothing but envy and happiness.
I didn't read the tags, so I thought this was anthro.
👍
I want to say this really good.
Because the events that led up to the tryst didn't feel very contrived. Shining needing to deal with cuckolded and Rarity already having a crush on him meant that when they did it, it felt natural.
EDIT: I am also hoping you write a sequel to this.
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'Wrong and Right' is about 75% complete!
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Yay!
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And now?? :'v xD
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80%!
I've got a couple other projects I'm trying to finish up before the holidays are over, but who knows? Maybe there'll be a Christmas miracle and I'll have it done before the year's out.
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:'3
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And now x2 xD xD
Oh heck this is hot
I wonder how disappointed cadence’s counterpart would be?
Dang.
First, congrats on the win.
The story was so good. I want them to stay together now. Shining’s natural chivalry is perfect for Rarity’s high class needs. High class is not high maintenance, fyi. And Rarity’s natural generosity is the perfect reciprocal to Shining. They want to support each other. It’s so perfect that it’s almost a wonder it’s not cannon. Yet I never considered it before today.
And the intimacy was 1000% believable as well. Rarity is there, wanting. Shining is there, needing. The respect is there. The sudden dive from him being hesitant to full on physicality was perfect. It’s exactly what would happen. Rarity’s confidence when Twilight came in to pee was sexy as hell. And that money shot….damn.
You’re play on the colors was also amazing. It brought out not just vivid visuals, but intense feelings of…I dunno. Just feelings. It increased the emotional investment. If I can think of words for what it did, I’ll be back and let you know.
In the mean time, you get a like. You get a follow. and I’m definitely adding this story to my best ships folder.
Glad you liked! You should check out the sequel 'Wrong and Right.'
This story was complete shit
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Was it? I dunno. I think it came out pretty good.
Care to elaborate?
I don’t know what to tell you you just didn’t deserve that $100
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It was $150, actually.
Sorry you feel that way.