Drawn by Pain

Once upon a time on the outskirts of Canterlot lives a family called the Rose family. This Family has a secret: they've adopted a Unicorn filly who is also a Crystal Pony. But when Sapphire, the Unicorn/ Crystal Pony, that the Rose Family adopted,meets a young stallion named Yellow Mask her life changes for the better.

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My Little Epona

My Little Epona #1 · Mar 20th, 2020 · · ·

This story really needs some editing. If you ever get an editor, I'd love to read it.
I'd recommend this group:
https://www.fimfiction.net/group/97/looking-for-editors

Comment posted by SapphireRose87 deleted Mar 21st, 2020

SapphireRose87

SapphireRose87 #3 · Mar 21st, 2020 · · ·

Could you be more specific on where it needs to be edited? And if you want to volunteer to edit it it would be appreciated.

SapphireRose87

SapphireRose87 #4 · Mar 21st, 2020 · · ·

Hi everybody! Feel free to give constructive criticism not just say it needs to be edited. I am aware that it needs to be edited. Just tell me which parts and I will go back over them. Please and Thank you

SapphireRose87

SapphireRose87 #5 · Apr 2nd, 2020 · · ·

Dear Readers,

I have been made aware that my story needs editing and I've already made a couple of passes at my chapters and my husband as helped mt greatly cause he's really good at it. If it's just typos and grimmer that are triggering you, I can fix that later. Anyway, if you're not going to give me constructive criticism or feedback, then just rate the story and move on! Don't tell me you're not going to read the story because it's not been edited; that might take awhile because no one wants to volunteer. I'm not changing my story just to please people, I already did that with Go, Go Pony Rangers and now I have more dislikes than likes on it. So I say this again, if you can not give me feedback, then rate the story and move on!

Sincerely,

Sapphire Rose

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