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Twilight Star


Twilight and Luna: two mares made for each other

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Even though Rainbow Dash allowed Tank to hibernate in the winter, she has been feeling sad because she would not have Tank to stay with her during the cold days and nights. Twilight, noticing Rainbow's sadness, decides that she will spend the winter with Rainbow Dash until spring. And who knows, they may always spend the winter together for the next winters to come.

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“As Tank is going to hibernate for the next winters, is it okay if the next winters spend the winter with me?”

You mean
"If Tank is going to hibernate for the next winter, is it okay if you'll spend the next winter with me"

This is my first correct grammar "like" if this makes sense

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It's Fixed it. Sorry about the mistake.

Twidash! I always love stories with them, even when they are platonic! This was so cute :twilightsheepish:

Twas kinda short, but still cute :heart: :twilightsmile:

I'm torn on this work. I love the concept, and I tried something similar in a story of mine, but the grammar structure is in need of an editor. It's just kinda clunky to read.

Overall the story was good! There’s just a few grammar errors but other than that, good job!

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Thank you for liking the story. And as for the mistakes, I'm sorry, but I've already fixed them

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