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Cardinal Dan Productions


I love to write, I love to read, and I love this community! If there's a story I want to read that doesn't exist yet, I'll write it myself.

Comments ( 32 )

Nice start! Looking forward to more ^^

Ohhhhhh the non-con tag. Interesting. I wonder where this will lead too?

This is a really good start. The only thing that concerns me is the Non-Con tag.

" he was good to make any mare happy" if they are all humans then this quote is wrong

Yeah, I agree with Hirow. Judging by Spike’s mention of the “palace,” I get that this is a humanized version of Equestria. However, the use of “mare” instead of “woman” is kinda throwing me off. Other than that, everything looks fine.

awesome chapter mate keep it up cant wait for the next chapter:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

Are you doing a human and an anthro story for each girl spike gets lucky with?

Perfectly Insane
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Wow. I don't even like Rainbow Dash that much and this first chapter already has me hooked! Well done, can't wait to see how this develops.

Nice 👌( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

10775990
According to tags, this would indeed be some humanized version of the FIM show, not EqG. The non-con tag worries me, though. :fluttershysad:

10777983
The tag is gone now. It had me worried a bit too. Maybe the author was undecided on whether or not Rainbow's initial grab warranted it or not.

10778406
That’s exactly right, actually. It began with questionable consent, but there is no rape so the tag is not necessary.

10778487
Thanks for the clarification. :twilightsmile:

This story has been very enjoyable so far. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.:heart:

So when’s the next chapter? It’s getting really hot so far.

She's 'addicked'(addicted) to him now.

awesome story mate keep it up cant wait for the next story:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

Great story, I really enjoyed this one. :pinkiehappy:

This was a good story and I enjoyed reading it. I suggest an epilouge chapter where the rest of the girls find out about the relationship and Rarity gets a little jealous.

Ever saw/watch the anime TONIKAWA: Over The Moon For You?

This looks promising. But I do have to point out a couple of head-scratchers.

After an always moment of silence, he shook his head and offered her a friendly grin.

A sly grin crept over the athlete’s face as she straightened her over her shoulders and behind her head.

Rainbow smiled up at him and took hold of his shaft. “Bring it in, Spike... I’ve wanted this for so long.”

He swallowed hard. “Me too...”

Uhmmm… Wut? :rainbowhuh:

Bit of a brisk pace for a believable romance but good enough for cute smut. :twilightsmile:

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