Today is the day that the young filly Derpy Hooves will find her destiny and the day that it will find her. She will face trials she was never prepared for and learn lesson no pony should ever have to learn. Will she be able to rise to the occasion? We must hope so.
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My First fic so any pointers will appreciated. Please if you find a grammatical or spelling error, check the comments to make sure no one else has pointed it out before you.
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That's also the frist comment on this fan fcition!
"Please if you find a grammatical or spelling error, check the comments to make
sure no one else has pointed it out before you."
No. With the amount of mistakes you make, be prepared to hear the same shit a lot.
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1170840 oh... I didn't think I was that bad
Let's hope she's good at spontaneous hiking trips!!!!!1!
seriously though
You desperately need to get an editor. If you want my suggestion, you should delete this story, find a willing and experienced editor, and rewrite and repost. Otherwise this story will flop.
1170881 OH LORD I DO SUCK
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You are. Now that we have come to that shocking conclusion, get better. It's as simple as that.
Useful links: here and here.
1170893 I'm not laughing at you, I'm not!
But seriously, maybe an editor would help. If you need advice or help or whatnot, mail me
Aside from the aforementioned editing issues, I really do like this story. I love how Derpy is portrayed as being pretty darn smart, instead of... well, overly derpy like a lot of stories portray her as. You have my favorite.
those eyes, they look at my soul
and they see muffins
they want muffins