This story is a sequel to Flash Sentry Chronicles: Dragon's Awakening
Let's journey back to a time before Flash Sentry, before the Elements of Harmony and before all the adventures that would go down in history as Equestria's most eventful age. To a time when Equestria was on a edge of crisis and needed a hero to save it. But who is that hero? What is the crisis facing Equestria? This is that story.
Edited by KingJoltik
This was An Good first chapter this story. And. Still im feel very bad for grand like im feel really bad to grand. And. Yeah even we make those Mistakes like this but im hope grand cheer himself up for it and im can't wait for the next chapter of this story
Damn! I know Grand did something bad in the past but I didn't expect to be that gruesome! No wonder why Grand rarely tells this one to Flash and others.
Do I smell the bromance between Grand and Doom?Although, I had a feeling that Doom eventually would die considered we don't see him in the present day.
I am curious of how Grand eventually becomes a Royal Knight, despite Grand feels he doesn't deserve it after what happened to his friends.
Why I had a feeling this scene would lead to important plot point? I means Grand being abandoned in the orphanage is exactly the same way as Flash… what is up with parents abandoned their kids? Are they too lazy to take care of them? I understand Flash's parents but definitely not whoever is Grand's parent?
Geez, I know Grand say he was different person when he was young but damn! His younger self is an ass!
Doom Chaser? Why do I had a feeling this character is going to be the deuteragonist of this fic? And he have same name and same rhythm as Doom Raizer… oh my! No wonder why he named his son "Doom"… oh dear! It makes it even worse!
Oh…. My…. God…. 😧😧😧😧
That really brutal, man!
Poor Grand…
Huh? That's how he got his catchphrase from.
Despite what happened, Grand finally earned his Cutie Mark once he decides to atone his sins.
I can't wait to meet Royal Knights from the past since all of current Royal Knights (except Grand who is young and Skybreaker who is even younger) are not born yet.
So much lore, so many questions solved but many more have been raised. Poor Grand didn't deserved this brutal punishment. Didn't imagine young Grand to be this rude. Hope to see the next chapter soon good work.
Holy cheese & crackers that was quite the brutal first entry on Grand's Tale! I mean longtime readers (like myself) have known he had some skeletons in his closet but I never expected it went like that!
Also we finally got where the *count up your sins* catchphrase came from.......just DAMN!!!!
The friendly rivalry between Grand & Doom was cool to see, course now I'm worried for him since we already had a defense system named after him (so to speak) so we'll see how that goes!
Here are some Highlights for this first showing :
Ugh seriously, way to tease us Banshee!
I can see why Grand took a liking to young Flash right away, they were both meatheads! (haven't heard that in like forever )
Kinda like this Doom fellow, well played!
Oh no indeed, bad bad idea!
Totally got you there Grand!
Something tells me is far too late for that!
Holey................................................, brutal doesn't even come close regarding this scene!
Quite the way for this catchphrase to be born, I'm speechless!
Now that was quite the trail by fire for Grand's cutie mark here, damn! (again)
That was quite the bloody first entry here Banshee, looking forward to see where it goes from here!
Holy cow! This got intense right from the start!
Ever since Grand mentioned in The Knight of Friendship that he became a Royal Knight to atone for his past I have been curious what exactly he has been trying to atone for. My initial thoughts were that he was an ex-criminal who realized the error of his ways, or he murdered someone once and regrets it. But the true reason, that he led all those kids to their deaths in a misguided attempt at being a hero really is dark.
Plus I guess now we know where Grand got his "count up your sins" catchphrase from. It isn't just a warning to his enemies, but a constant reminder to himself for what he did. I understand why he blames himself, and it was his fault for being stupid and reckless, but there comes a time when he should be allowed to forgive himself after all the good he has done over the years afterwards.
I was also surprised that there was another "Doom" in Grand's past. I'm guessing Grand named him son "Doom Raizer" in honor of his friend "Doom Chaser".
Now this is a story that the young Fire Heart will need to hear about if he ever wants to become a great Royal Knight like Grand or Flash. Heart can definitely take and use many moral lessons from Grand's life story.
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Can someone tell me if there's a meaning behind his cutie mark, cause I'm not sure.
Yeah, I get that Doom Chaser's advice was what finally got Grand off his butt, but that advice is only going to hurt him and his mental health in the long run. I mean, if Grand doesn't give himself room for forgiveness, all those sins are going to pile up and destroy him.
Not a bad prologue, but why does everyone have to lose something to become a hero, whatever happened to do the right thing because it is the right thing? That's a serious question, why couldn't Grand's have 'doing right for right's own sake' be his motive? It would really hammer home the cost of being a Royal Knight he has had to pay, namely his terrible father-son and grandfather-grandson relationships. Know it sets up that Grand's life story and his time as a Royal Knight comes off as the the near futility of seeking atonement, given his relationships with his son and grandson, especially if Flash was not part of his life.
I know I am suppose to feel bad for Grand, and I should be interested in Grand's origins, but I can't. I can't because at the end of this Grand will 'atone' for the lives of the foals he lead to their deaths, but that will only lead into his relationships with Doom (his son) and Lightning Blitz and we know how those relationships caused far more harm, endangered more lives, etc, than leading an unspecified but doubtfully large number of foals to any early grave, a cost that undermines his quest for atonement that will be the focus of this story.
Now had Grand's motives been 'doing right because it is the right thing to do' we can better compare or contrast him to Flash and we can see the previously unseen costs of being a Royal Knight and see if Flash is capable of paying the same price as Grand and/or how Flash will respond if forced to face the same issue, much like the Machete Order of watching Star Wars, we see Flash's story to a point and then we see Flash's predecessor's (Grand) life and how Grand either falls short and we wonder if Flash will succeed where Grand failed or will fail like Grand or we see Grand succeeded and we wonder if Flash will succeed as well or will he fail.
However that story can't be told now, because we will have to see if Grand can say if his disastrous relationships with his son and grandson (without any interference from Flash) was worth trying to atone for his err? Does how he failed as a father and grandfather negate his acts of repentance? Either question really deserve an answer, because this over all series is about Flash, therefor the questions we should be asking at the end of this entry and seeing if we can uncover those answers in Season 7, the Movie, Season 8 and Season 9 are 'will Flash fail in the same places Grand failed?' and 'How can Flash avoid the same pitfalls or is he DOOMED to repeat his mentor's mistakes?'
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Well, Grand was for the longest time a terrible grandfather and is still a terrible father, so yeah fixation on past errors... not very conducive for raising a child or grandchild
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heck he named is own son 'one who awakens (raizer which is an alternate spelling of raiser) judgment, fate, ruin and/or death (doom)'... and in the land of rainbows and sunshine where everyone's name matches them to a 't'... to quote Tony Stark 'Not a good plan.'
Not that Doom Chaser has that much better of a name, which literally means 'one who follows, hunts or pursues (chaser) judgement, fate, ruin and/or death'
Once that was done, the criminals were transported off to prison to await trail,
Change trail to trial
It seems Cutie Markers are the one that causing a crisis for Equestria.
I know Grand doesn't want to get higher rank but eventually, he have to be Royal Knight to stop Technica and her Cutie Markers.
Here's highlights
Big Score? Damn! I didn't expect you to appear! Wait, is Big Score in his mid twenties cause Big Score must be in his either sixties or seventies when Flash confront him.
Look like we are going to learn how Live Wire fall in love with Grand Hoof and who she was before married him.
The Slacker is the one you ends up married to, Live Wire.
Well, we finally know who is the main villain of the story and Grand Hoof's first big opponent as a Royal Knight
As for Bomber, here's potential suspects of how could be the real identity of Bomber
* Number Cruncher
* Center Stage
* A random mare
* Nobody
P.S.
WHERE THE FUCK IS ROYAL KNIGHT?!?!?! Should they been here when Technica and Bomber causing the mess or they are just being lazy…. No wonder why Grand Hoof becomes the leader of Royal Knights. Lol
Oh snap, so this is where those Cutie Markers came about, well played at how you got them introduced on an earlier story Banshee! Loved the dynamic between Grand & Doom taking down Big Score (wow, creep's been around that long?!), also really hope that's not Cruncher under that villain's mask next time around!
As for Highlights go :
Damn, this guy's been around!
Oh crap!!!
LOL that was a very short reign King Score!
Oh girl, if you only knew!
OOOHHHHHhhhhhhhhh snap!!!!
Really hope that's not who I think it is under that mask!
Sweet chapter Banshee, let's see where it goes from here!
10889790 10890016 You guys realise it's not the same Big Score...right. If you go read season 1, boast busters, you'll see their designs aren't the same.
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Oohhh my bad, I take it the present one took on that name instead?
Anyway thanks for clearing that up Banshee!
This is getting more and more interesting.
We see more of Grand's past that was briefly mentioned in previous stories, like these Cutie Markers. Those made for a great chapter back in Season 5, and now we get to see Grand take care of (most of) them like he said he did. Interesting there is a different Big Shot back then too. Maybe the new one, that is to say the one we all know about, stole the name? Or maybe it was given to him by the original?
But we also get to see more of Live Wire. It will be fun getting to see her and Grand bond and slowly fall in love. Maybe she is the one who will convince him to become a Royal Knight? I agree with Doom though. Grand was a kid at the time, so he needs to stop holding it against himself long after he has taken responsibility.
I hope Center Stage gets hit with karma hard though. He sexually assaulted Remarie and ended up making Cruncher think she is cheating on him. Guys like that who only see woman as possessions deserve no mercy.
Ha! No wonder Flash Sentry seems so much like Spider-Man, he must have gotten it from Grand Hoof when he was training him.
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Oh! Thank you for clarify it!
I didn't know there was another Big Score in the past!
That's not how ranks in the military work. If Doom is calling Grand 'boss', Grand must there for out rank Doom, and Lieutenant out ranks Sergeant, and when someone calls for officers of different ranks, they call the superior officer first. in this case it would be 'Lieutenant Chase, Sergeant Hoof (because you don't use first names when using ranks unless in special events)
Banshee, body, you have an up hill battle as it to sell this story (to me), you really should be better about these kinds of details
10893755 Maybe that's just how my version of Equestria works. Maybe Celestia decided Sargent sounded more important then Lieutenant.
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But it doesn't, Sergeant comes from the Latin Servire: meaning to serve, as in a servant or slave
Lieutenant on the other hand comes from Old French meaning 'to hold a place' as in keep a fort or military position or compound occupied.
You have Sergeants serve the needs of the commissioned officers, while you trust Lieutenants to hold a the fort, while the general plans for the battle a head.
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This would go a lot easier for and on both of us if you just admitted that you make a mistake with the ranking.
10893781 Fine, I made a mistake. But I'm not changing it. I just think Sargent sounds better then Lieutenant. I was in the Air Cadets and that's not a rank they use
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Just ignore him. It's not like the show itself was completely accurate with the titles and rankings in their armies anyway, like how Seaspray was a "General" in the Navy when he would be an "Admiral" in real life.
So if you say Sargent outranks Lieutenant in Equestria, then that's how it works.
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Um that's not true either, The Air Force has Sergeants and Lieutenants and Lieutenants out rank Sergeants
10893865 Maybe yours does, but not mine.
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That's just intellectual lazy arguing, 'The show was wrong, so it's okay that you're AU is wrong'.
No, it's not okay. We know it's wrong, and part of this whole fanfiction thing is to correct the errors found on the show.
I worked with the military, you fuck up and call a commissioned officer by a non-commission rank, you can bet that you liaisons officer was going to hear about it, then you supervisor and you're go to have spend hours re-learning every single rank and which was a commissioned officer and which was a non-commissioned.
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I'm ignoring you because you literally can't give any positive reviews if your life depended on it. All you ever do is rant and complain about stuff you didn't make yourself. It's boring. You're boring. Unlike Banshee's stories. So if you don't have anything nice to say (and we all know you don't) then don't read these stories.
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I figured as much. Did you run out of fitting names or something?
10895179 No. Honestly, I figured this was gonna be an easy thing to figure out. This Big Score is meant to be modern day Big Score's grandfather.
If bad guys go too far with Cutie Markers, Grand has no choice but he have to become a Royal Knight in order to save Equestria.
I still have a feeling that Bomber is Number Cruncher, considered the way he acts when Grand and Doom told them about Cutie Markers and he seems hurt when he thought Remarie but fortunately, they told him that Remarie still love him
Here's highlights
*Cough* Cyberpunk 2077 *Cough*
Look like Doom will be playing bad cop.
Either we are going to meet his father in this fic or one of future Flash Sentry fics… but by that time, he probably be dead.
I wouldn't be surprised if there's falling in love montage between Grand and Live since they are going to get married at some point in their life.
Also, is Doom trying to hook them up? Is he's GrandxLive shipper or what?
The fight scene was pretty cool. Even before he got a gear Grand shows he can still hold his own against magical opponents. These Cutie Markers are just as dangerous as they were made out to be back in Season 5. Especially since they are still untested here. Grand and Doom are going to need to be careful to stop them.
Grand's secret is finally out to Celestia and Live Wire. It certainly helped subdue Live Wire's anger towards Grand. It also looks like they are going undercover together to infiltrate the Cutie Marker's party. I bet we'll start to see some romance spark between the two of them. Maybe she is the one to convince him to accept the position as a Royal Knight? Like she said, how some Knights see it as a punishment instead of a promotion, that sounds like how Grand sees his role as a Knight in the series proper, being one to make up for his past sins.
Sweet fight between Grand/Doom VS the masked nuts, although Bomber has some serious psych issues! Course now we know why since those Cutie Markers really are a double-edge sword!
Guess it was time for somepony else (Celestia/Live) to find out what happened all those years ago during Grand's foal days, at least that's out in the open. Also I can see the seeds of romance been planted here with the undercover mission for Grand/Live at that *demonstration* party, can't wait to see that been crashed!
Oh let's check out these Highlights behind the invitation card! :
*scoffs* some marketing for this poison, also really hope Bomber's true identity is not who I think it is!
Well said Grand, mare's buyer beware!
Yep, the cat's out of the bag!
Oohhh looking forward to this *date* of sorts!
Seems things will get even more intense next chapter, awesome!
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For Pete's sake, CDPR is doing to their best to redeeming themselves of the mistakes made in producing Cyperpunk 2077. Plus that dumb coughing gag is getting VERY VERY old.
Is it bad that I'm more invested in the romance between Grand and Live than I am with the Cutie Markers?
A sad but yet heroic way to die for Doom. :(
Center or Bomber is going to pay for what he did! He went too far!
Isn't it me or this scene remind me of when Kamen Rider Skull first Henshin in his movie? I getting that vibe with Grand using his hammer for the first time.
Here's highlights
Yeah… unfortunately, he would hate that magic and strained his relationship with a certain Unicorn over that.
Uh no….
Huh, I guess Live is right… definitely a cliches speech! Lol
Uh no…..
What is up with everyponies' obsession with Kung Fu? Are they big fan of Bruce Lee?!
Yeah! Exactly!
You got to be kidding me!
UH NO……
Don't do it, Doom! Don't pull Future Gohan on him!
Doom…..
Rest In Peace, Doom Chaser… you would have been a Royal Knight if you didn’t sacrifice yourself.
To honor you, here's a song by Aerosmith
Fly away, Doom Chaser.
Poor Grand.
I hope he will finally take on Royal Knight to avenge his best friend's death and kick Technica and especially Bomber's ass!
Great work!
I had a feeling Doom wasn’t going to survive this story, I was just curious how he was going to die. His sacrifice here reminds me a lot of how Lightning Blitz tried to sacrifice himself to save Canterlot, which was against the last few Cutie Markers. Of course the sad difference here is unlike Lightning, Doom didn’t have someone to save him just in time.
So his sacrifice will probably be what finally convinces Grand to become a Knight, to honor his friend and prevent anyone else from getting hurt again.
That is a funny moment, but also shows Live has been around the block long enough to get how villains work. Kinda reminds me of a scene from Into the Spider-Verse where Peter B. Parker correctly predicts how Kingpin will threaten one of his scientists with the line “You’ve got 24 hours.”
I admit, the amount of ponies that chose Kung-Fu was hilarious. But the talents between them, Shift, Gemini, and Kinetic, along with Bomber, those were the talents used by the last few Cutie Markers that Lightning and his friends faced. That is an interesting detail.
Damn, we all knew Doom wasn't gonna make it to the end to this tale but.......DAMN!!!
Those Cutie Markers are very dangerous indeed with the way Bomber's went nuts with that last stunt, sure feel awful for Grand at losing his best friend like that. Course if the one behind the mask is who I think it is (pretty sure primadonna actor's not it at this point) then it will be a double whammy for poor Grand!
Gonna love Grand tapping into the celestial gear's true power on the next confrontation with these marker nuts, bring it!!!
Highlights for this chapter are :
Does it??? Something tells me you're not gonna like that reveal when it happens Grand!
*sigh* And with that Doom became a dead pony walking!
Oh great, now everypony's kung-fu fighting!
Oh hell no!!!!
*a silent moment for an awesome pony*
Like the first chapter, this one was a hard read in terms of emotion!
No matter what direction it takes after this I'm looking forward to how it wraps up next chapter (expecting another punch to the gut probably), till next time Banshee!
Another good chapter Banshee. Out of curiosity how many chapters is in this fic?
Oh no! I knew Number Cruncher was Bomber! I didn't want to believe but I knew he was him the entire time! But why, why would he betrayed his own best friends over Cutie Markers?!
At least, Grand finally accept the Celestic Gear so he can save Equestria from Technica and Bomber!
A great scene between him and Live as well that flashback sequence too! :)
So what is Number Cruncher's reason of becoming the villainous Bomber? Let's find out on next chapter!
Here's highlights
Uh no….
Well, that asshole is dead… and he deserves it for what he did to Remarie.
Please don't tell me it's him….
A callback to The Day Flash Sentry Died one.
Although, I hope this is not like pandemic we went through…. The idea of a town being infected by a sickness…. I hope not!
Yeah, Boys!
THE BIRTH OF THE LEGENDARY ROYAL KNIGHT AND THE MENTOR OF A FUTURE ROYAL KNIGHT, GRAND FUCKING HOOF!!!!!!!!
Uh no…..
UH NO!!!!
MAN!!!!! Look like the friendship between Grand and Number has been broken.
P.S.
The more I think about it, there's one hint about Number being Bomber.
Because Number is rhymed with Bomber. If you took out N and U part and replaced it with B and O… you got this.
Number= Bomber
In other words, Center couldn't being Bomber for 3 reasons.
One, his name doesn't rhymes with Bomber and two, you can't kill off him if he was the main threat along with Technica and three, Number is more personal to Grand than some random asshole stage actor like Center.
I see what you did, Banshee… clever.
10916203 Er...yeah. That was totally intentional. I'm smart
I knew that Center Stage was a Red Herring the whole time. Ever since the second chapter, Number Cruncher just reminded me too much of the Cutie Markers from the present, what with him being unsatisfied with his talent and profession. That being said, I hoped I was wrong and that it wasn't him, but it looks like this explains why neither him nor Doom Chaser appeared at all in the present. Grand lost both of his friends. I'm not sure who Technica could be though.
Also, even if Center wasn't Bomber like Grand thought, I honestly don't feel bad over his death too much. The guy was a huge jerk to everyone, so he honestly had it coming. He might not have been a criminal, but he wasn't innocent either.
I was afraid Doom's death was going to affect Grand negatively like it did here. He is blaming himself for it, even though he didn't get Doom killed; Bomber did. Thankfully though, Grand is slowly coming around, thanks to Live helping him. Maybe once this is taken care of, he'll accept the position of Royal Knight.
Welp Damnit! Think we all called it about Bomber's true identity (even though we hoped it wasn't ) Grand lost 2 friends here by the extremes, looking forward to see what bullcrap Cruncher tells Grand next chapter & seeing him finally accepting the Royal Knight role! Also....yeah not shedding many tears for Center, he was a jackass!
Highlights include :
Well........pop goes the weasel!
Little late for that after what happened to Doom!
Sorry pal, get wrecked!!!
Looking forward to the conclusion of this story, keep them coming Banshee!!!
Irony.
WHY?????!!!!!!
Gosh! This story is drowning in big sad. . I'm not trying to be discouraging or anything, but I'm just having a hard time enjoying this.
I love this story so far. It's so beautiful, an origin's story well done. Hope to see the rest soon.
Awesome fight between Grand and Technica! So happy that he accepted who he is and finally beat the crap out of that bitch for what she did to Doom and Cruncher!
At least, it explains how he got his scar from…. his friend!
Now, the final battle between 2 former friends! Oh dear…
Here's highlights
I don't like it!
Cruncher, calm down… you acting like a crazy stallion!
Yup… he has gone crazy. :(
DEFINITELY CRAZY!!!!!!!
Oh, crap.
Oh, crap!
Technica, count up your sins!
Damn, Grand!
That's what she gets for messing with Grand… Now, she will be counting her sins….. IN HELL!!!!!!!
She got burned...literally.
Quite the fight between Grand & Technica, not to mention that ending! She sure mess with the wrong Stallion, plus it was sad we got to know how Grand got that scar on his face!
Highlights for today's chapter :
Good eye there Grand!
Sorry Cruncher, not a good excuse for all the hurt/dead ponies caught in it, especially one of your own friends!
Wow, arrogant mare's sure drunk with power here!
Still arrogant I see, that's gonna bite you in the flank!
Whoa!!!...........................well he did warn you!
Looking forward to the final confrontation between Grand & Cruncher, till the next one Banshee!