I felt your shape. You felt my size. We understood each other perfectly for a moment. Our separation, while necessary, hurt more than any pain that would follow. It is only by being apart that we might create a world to hold our love. It is only by being hurt that we may heal, again and again. I think I would rather be together in the true sense of the word than to love you like this.
Wrote this for a gift exchange for a server I'm in as a gift for Seer. Edited by Kim. Cover art is a commissioned piece from Slime. For the full reading experience, please read the formatted version over here before reading the two separate pieces. The story was an experiment in using formatting as a character in and of itself.
Chapters (2)
Good story, but the formatted piece in the description is really awkward to read. Should we highlight the white text? Read alternatingly or as a continuum? It doesn't mesh well as the later and the former works better as separate chapters.
I do like it though, their feelings do run deep in this piece
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the highlighting is the idea, yeah! ill admit: its not meant to be Readable, not easily at least. when the person it was intended for read it they read just celestias part first, which was my goal. the idea is to then go back and highlight over text, revealing the second and matching narrative told by luna. the original document included two alt text symbols at the end that contained the links to the separate pieces of text for better readability. the formatted piece is more abt the emotional discovery of the second quieter voice that is often overlooked rather than being easy on the eyes.
sorry that was so long winded! im glad u liked the story tho and i rlly appreciate the comment 💛
Sorry it took me so long to comment on this Dawn :mydinks:
Loved this, what's more to say really? I think you met the 'brief', insofar as gift exchanges really have them, excellently, merging some truly clever and original presentation techniques with your trademark style. Your take on the princesses in the one I so often enjoy, that being the more godlike sides of their personality, but you imbue this with a wonderful analysis of what makes them tick as flesh and blood.
There's a lot to break down and analyse here in terms of what the piece is saying, and I think you leave things a good balance of oblique and clear so that people will, while having similar takeaways, all have their own personal unique takes on everything.
The presentation in terms of the prose was beautiful, but what's new? I'd expect nothing less from your writing and you absolutely delivered.
I really loved this and am very thankful <3
This was a neat bit of poetic storytelling. The use of words here really are lovely.
I checked out the doc first, and rather than what you intended of going back and highlighting after finishing the first perspective, I quickly noticed the hidden text and tried to read it alongside the visible text, which was a real headache. Having the sections separate made for a better read.
The line of hidden text that starts with 'either' is duplicated in the document. :/ Not sure if there's another line that should be in there somewhere, or if that means it's not going to work out evenly with fitting into the other half.
I dislike the subject matter, but you wrote it quite well.
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oh shit, i didnt notice that in my edit! thanks for catching it. i wonder if its gonna line up now.....