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Chrysalis like any mother would do anything for her daughter, even swallowing all her pride to ask for help from the same ponies that caused her disaster.
Here we present our favorite insect queen together with our best farm pony, how they met, and the friendship that grew little by little in them, along with some hidden truths.

Part of an alternate universe I'm creating and second backstory of the characters, all the characters will have a backstory in some way or another and will be added as time needs it along with their place in the timeline.

and as always I am forced to use Deepl and Grammarly to translate my texts, so thank you if you find any grammatical problem or something similar so I can correct it as soon as possible.

Sex and death tag is for the conversation only, like in all of my stories

Featured 19-02-2022 :twilightsheepish:

Image by 1deathpony1

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Comments ( 11 )

if Elitro can sense death coming, does that mean he knows at the end that Chrysalis is going to die by the end of the next night?

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ELitro knows a lot of things and most of them are explained in the next story, he has a background, and a mission to do.

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Chrysalis die? was that implied? did I miss something? Also the end seemed sketchy felt like they gave her the egg?

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Chrysalis says she goona die and needs the help of AJ for her daughter and the egg is in the cave.

and now I need to finish the background of Rarity, Spike, Rainbow, Fluttershy, Luna, and the story of Chrysalis in the past.

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glad you like it :twilightsmile:

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I don't want Chrysalis to die before she can meet and talk to Starswirl. I think it must be a very funny encounter given the way you put the comic book origin story here.

"Oh, excuse me, my name is Ummm... Random Pony, yes Random Pony and I am a... normal pony that lives near Hollow Shades, I was sent by my queen... by my mother, yes, my mother in search of you... I mean your apples, my what... mother likes apples very much and my brothers too, but my... mother would like very much for you to go to our house.... with your apples, we really like apples." he replied to AppleJack, what caught the farmer pony's attention was that this pony was a red-colored pony with a yellow mane and tail with a cutie mark with the letters PT, AppleJack didn't know how but she felt she had seen this pony before.

best acting of the year everyone :rainbowlaugh:

Pinkie stops in midair just inches above the ground and hovers at that height for a couple of seconds

i cant be the only one who finds this terrifying.

That was a good story.

I liked some of the premise to the story, but this was extremely hard to read. Grammar mistakes all over the place like this was translated from another language. Incorrect pronouns. Some OOC bits. I got part of the way through the dialogue with Chrysalis and Applejack and I couldn't deal with it anymore. Please, go back through this or get an editor.

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