Princess Celestia has lived for 4 billion years. Her children have left their cradle, and Equis sits nearly abandoned. She must perform her duty one last time.
My entry for, and winner of, /mlp/'s 2023 Pastejam. The first and last lines were set by Aftercase, but other than that, we were given free rein to write whatever. This was an attempt to write using only the absolute minimum number of words allowed for the prompt. Sadly, that's 300 words too few, so this is the extended edition to get it onto Fimfic.
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Awesome. I adore the details you’ve added in to make this fit on Fimfiction—I hardly think they detract from the work at all: you lose some atmosphere to get some character. Wonderful work across the board, pun-intended. It’s an incredibly inspiring piece, and I’m still going to be jealous about just how well you made the original fit into 700 words. Thanks for bringing it here: it’s immediately going on my recommended. Super happy to see stuff like this being written right now.
That was beautiful. Very bittersweet.
I wonder what this might be like from Luna's perspective.
I liked the original and I liked this one too. The atmosphere is a tad different from the Pastejam version, but I still enjoyed it thoroughly.
I hope you write more in the future, m8.
I'm surprised Celestia didn't decide to tie her magic to a new sun (I'm not saying that this isn't beautiful it absolutely is but if her magic is stellar in nature as it should be she should be able to tie it to a new Sun and return or maybe when it goes supernova she'll be reborn)
11513967 Luna, "HA! My celestial body is a lifeless cold ROCK! It'll last until the protons of the atoms themselves all decay! I'M THE MOST IMMORTALEST OF THEM ALL!! THE NIGHT SHALL LAST 4EVAR!!"
*1000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000 years of absolute nothingness later* Luna, "I may have made a terrible mistake..."
I might agree with you in preferring the original 700W piece, but I still liked the additional context you added to this version. Starswirl's comments helped build on the melancholy of it all. Well done on winning the contest!