Frag/ment/ed

by Dashie04

Frag/Ment/Ed

It was teasing, pulling me along for the ride. I wanted, desired, needed something, or somepony
to pull down this mask. Mean more to me than playing pretend. A friend, To give me more
than my falsified experiences. I wanted to feel cute. But when acting cute is such an act
that act might become reality but then what is mine. If you act for so long you just
become the mask… is it an act? Or does that mean you’re just confused. Am I just
confused? I’ve heard it before, and soon I’d hear it again and again and again.
Forever repeating never ceasing. That was who I was. Bunny wasn’t me she,
he, they(?) were a character I designed. A happy pen pal for others
to interact with. To befriend, to love, to care for, to treat better
than they deserved. What could you deserve as a simple act?
Do you think Celestia wanted to rule, or did she fall into it?
When did the act stop. When did she begin. Did she ever
begin? Or was she like me, never breaking down the
mask? I want to be cute. Am I a mare because I feel
cute as one? I broke down too long ago to think
about this. But now I have to. Thinking, who
I’m meant to be? Who I feel like? Or am I
Another lost soul caught between
Themselves and the pony they?
She? He? Wants to be. Stuck.
I have to think, be bold, be
somepony better be some
pony new, be somepony
who’s bold and unique.
Not somepony afraid
of who they might
become. Am I a
mare? Am I?
Am I cute?
I… don’t
Know.
Who.
Am.
I?

Thoughts
spiral
out
of
control.

I
am
Simply

Frag/

Ment/

Ed.

Author's Note:

All done with in-built FiMFiction formatting. Took months but here’s my grand return. Hope you enjoy.

Comments

[Avellana]

My god this hit me hard, I’m gonna be rereading this over and over huh?

Great job :3

[Dashie04]

Anyone offput by the like/dislike ratio, head into the stats page and scroll down to the places where this was linked.

[Bicyclette]

Frag/

Ment/

Ed.

oh that is really cool! love the formatting, love the stream of consciousness here. all of these thoughts that the narrator kept dammed away, bursting through here and there at the seams until they all come out in a torrent like this. love the ambition here, the 100-even wordcount is impressive. thank you for writing!

[Dashie04]

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Thank you for reading and enjoying the story!

Thanks for the 8 seperate comments as well.

[FanOfMostEverything]

Ooh, brilliant work in capturing dysphoria and the burden of an eternal facade. The narrowing vortex of text in the last chapter brings to mind water circling a drain, down and down into a terrible yet inevitable finality. Great stuff throughout. Thank you for it and congrats on the bronze.

[Loganberry]

Hello! Have a slightly belated courtesy note for my review. I kinda guessed the general subject of this story, but the fic is thoughtful and sympathetic without being cloying, which is a good balance to strike. Easy for me to upvote.