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The time twilight didn't choose a mare, and the fans don't want it!

mares, MARES, M A R E S, twilight can't get enough of them, but wait, where's the stallions? wait where's the mares?

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Im a FREE mare, and i can choose who i want · 9th Nov 2023 · 839 words
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Smooching · 9th Nov 2023 · 177 words
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Starswirl the Beardless

Starswirl the Beardless #1 · Nov 19th, 2023 · 1 · · Smooching ·

I liked this story, although I feel like it didn't milk its premise as well as it could. The joke of the story is fine, but it just goes by so quickly that you hardly have time to appreciate it. Also, your formatting was a bit awkward, and you had quite a few mechanical errors throughout. I think this could have been much better if the jokes had had more buildup, and if you had done a little more proofreading.