Black Paladin is a first time gamer at the pushing of Princess Luna. He hopes to gain friends through an new online mmorpg name Equestrian Earth. Will he discover the epicness of the game, or will he be lost in the game forever?
Note: Spin-off of ChaoticNotes Equestrian Earth. I have full permissions as stated by his group.
Other Note: Please support Black Paladin in Shades of the Past.
Hahahahaha...
I've found your new story, Necroesphere, so prepare for my critique
But food first. Food is good.
And you should've asked Coporaptor for a coverpic ~
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He still needs to do one for Resonance.
Intriguing, please continue, good sir
So, is Paladin unintentionally shadowing the Mane 6 or something?
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It is very unintentional. Though he has no idea who they actually are at this point.
Pretty cool story you got going here. I look forward to the next chapter.
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Which should be up soon.
Trixie! Methinks she just wants him for his city-levelling power.
>>>mfw when ending
. . .
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What we talking about here?
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Well, I can say at the best that I'm interested on what Trixie is going to do next.
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I'm working on that. Been busy with homework and college apps
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akay.
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Expect in the next few days.
Oh jeez.
I've been waiting for that boss fight.
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What fight?
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Most dungeons would usually have a boss at the end.
I should of told you about this.
Of course, it's traditional with most RPGs that cave/forest/city/(well, anything) dungeons would have a boss at the end.
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Ok then. Ummm... Do you approve of where i'm going with Paladin and trixie, or should i tone it down a bit.
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Well, it's certainly something I'm not going to hint at in my story.
Keyword: Hint
Whatever you do in your story is perfectly fine as long as you're okay with it.
If you truly want my advise though, then I suggest toning it down a little if you are getting the feeling that your OC isn't being well-received by the audience.
Also, sleepy Rainbow Dash.
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Remember those words, my young padawan.
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Ok sire! As long as you don't feel it would mess with your story. And because I'm rolling with the story for now. This is literally writing itself actually.
This is actually pretty interesting.
Reminds me that I need to get to work on my spin off.
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Heh, yeah. I kind of just left it. Need to finish writing!
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I can honestly say that you should expect to see me every time you decide to release a chapter.
And silly me, I forgot to give you a thumbs up.
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Check with you? Why?
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Where did you get that from?
You should expect to see me every time you decide to release a chapter....Um, whats your native language/or if its english you must not be below the bible belt.
I'm sorry if I confused you.
I just meant that I''l be commenting on all of you next chapters.
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Oh, ok. No, it's just that any turn of phrase can sometimes escape me.
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No problem, just glad we fixed that breakdown in communication.
Thats right people! Chapter 5! I am going to have to take a while to catch up to Chaotic.
For some reason I love to read about ponies recapping past events to those around them.
Trixie and Black Paladin seem like an adorable couple and I can't wait to see what Shining Armor and BP talk about.
Plus that first date with Trixie is gonna be something.
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I'm glad you like it.
Update? UPDATE! *sits down and reads* Physics work can wait!
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I know, homework right. But, you know, it is good to learn so you can go on and live. Especially if you want to keep this as a hobby.
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What chapter are you on?
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Am I on? What do you mean?
1928014 Online course, so I can always do it a little bit later. But yeah, I'm focusing mainly on school again.
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Were you referring to my story's chapters?
Btw, I liked chapter 5.
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No, my chapter 5. Um, I think I am up to in between 4 and 5 maybe of yours. I don't really know actually. I was just working up to the encounter of the two parties. And have BP power level past Luna.
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In terms of reading, or story line of your spin off?
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Mostly in terms of the story of mine to yours. My story line is progressing a bit slower than yours, but that is because details are important. And because I need to know what happens in yours at some points, so I am researching and making notes. This is mainly because my character is closely entwined to the main plot, but that may have been an accident of placement more than likely.
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>submits OC to author
>author accepts OC into story
>author makes OC teammate to Trixie
>author makes Trixie student to Princess Luna
>all according to plan
The only thing I didn't expect was your romance with Trixie.
You do have a role in the main story. Not too small, but not really big either.
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When I started writing this, neither did I. Ever hear of letting a story decide to write itself. That's what happened here. And I like where it is going. I like Trixie a lot more now because of it, but her voice is something that kind of bugs me. May just be the tone she has in the episodes though.
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I do that more or less, but I at least plan ahead.
Shining seemed a bit OoC to me.
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How so? I want to make sure I can write him, because this is first time.
1960593 He seemed a little abrupt and abrasive at times towards Paladin. As far as I can tell, the only time that he acted like that when off-duty was when he was fully under the control of Chrysalis. ON-duty, he would be like that, since he's a military officer. In a casual setting, however, he is usually more relaxed, and even jokes around with others/ teases them (read: a bit). It's sort of like Spitfire's off-duty vs. on-duty (i.e. at Wonderbolts Academy) persona.
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A: They were on duty. (How you miss that, I don't know.)
B: He is being a friend to Black Paladin and pointing out his flaws. We never see him interact with stallions, so this is my assumption of how he would be on duty.
1965783 Ok, I may have missed that they were on duty. You raise valid points, and I can accept this as being part of his personality now.
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Glad we could clear this up. I really want to strive to do my best with characters.
So they have and issue...then settle it with PvP and getting drunk?
Lol
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So much win.