I like your writing style. It's a bit bombastic at times, but on the whole, it is very eloquent and lyrical. To that end, I am intrigued with the way you set up the...ahem..."situation"...and then followed through. I especially enjoy erotic scenes that are a "slow burn," as is the case with your second chapter. Mind you, I prefer a stallion to be involved with two (or more!) mares, but this was an interesting read.
In subsequent chapters, I would very much enjoy a..."situation"...with Pinkie and a stallion...or two! Outside of "TwiSlut," she's my Favorite pony to lewd, although I'm starting to get some traction with Derpy in my latest stories. Aaaaand if you give a few MILFs sum lovin' I wouldn't be upset!
[Side Note] I haven't seen anyone use an Em Dash in a lonnnng while...thank you for the reminder!
Promising set-up. Hoping for plenty of saucy FxF stuff. Side note, but I'm a sucker for cunnilingus and fingering. Looking forward to seeing where you go next.
That was very well written. It's always refreshing to see a good bit of kink (even light kink), +1 if it manages visual language I've actually not encountered before. Was it sometimes bombastic? Whatever, maybe. For me what matters is if it's entertaining, and this was 100% riveting. I'm a fairly picky reader, so kudos to you. (I might be biased having written my own "bombastic" kink fic with Rarity as the dommy, and you scratched a very particular itch.)
Anyway, I'm curious to see what else you do! I'd love more with Rarity and Twilight, as stated, but your cover art has me looking forward to best bacon human making an appearance.
11777566 Yes, I do tend to get a little deep in the weeds sometimes. I get a vision in my head and I get lost in making sure people see it with twenty words when five will do.
Comment posted by johnthecollie deleted Dec 18th, 2023
11777571 I certainly hope you're taking more from the praise than anything else! I didn't mind when you went into the weeds. (and if you did, you didn't go too far IMO)
11777707 I do appreciate it, thank you. And criticism is as important and praise. It helps growth, and it’s a good thing to acknowledge. So thank you on both parts.
11777904 I mean, yes. Ideally the whole gambit is on offer as this takes place in an entirely different universe with entirely different standards. I'll just make up stories for everyone or anything to exist if need be. Anything to facilitate a bit of fun.
I like your writing style. It's a bit bombastic at times, but on the whole, it is very eloquent and lyrical. To that end, I am intrigued with the way you set up the...ahem..."situation"...and then followed through. I especially enjoy erotic scenes that are a "slow burn," as is the case with your second chapter. Mind you, I prefer a stallion to be involved with two (or more!) mares, but this was an interesting read.
In subsequent chapters, I would very much enjoy a..."situation"...with Pinkie and a stallion...or two! Outside of "TwiSlut," she's my Favorite pony to lewd, although I'm starting to get some traction with Derpy in my latest stories. Aaaaand if you give a few MILFs sum lovin' I wouldn't be upset!
[Side Note] I haven't seen anyone use an Em Dash in a lonnnng while...thank you for the reminder!
11777447
Thank you very much.
And this story is open to pretty much any sort of encounters. They don’t always have to be named partners, so you might get your wish. Stay tuned.
Promising set-up. Hoping for plenty of saucy FxF stuff. Side note, but I'm a sucker for cunnilingus and fingering. Looking forward to seeing where you go next.
Okay well now I just want more RariTwi
That was very well written. It's always refreshing to see a good bit of kink (even light kink), +1 if it manages visual language I've actually not encountered before. Was it sometimes bombastic? Whatever, maybe. For me what matters is if it's entertaining, and this was 100% riveting. I'm a fairly picky reader, so kudos to you. (I might be biased having written my own "bombastic" kink fic with Rarity as the dommy, and you scratched a very particular itch.)
Anyway, I'm curious to see what else you do! I'd love more with Rarity and Twilight, as stated, but your cover art has me looking forward to best bacon human making an appearance.
Cheers for this! Can't wait for more.
11777566
Yes, I do tend to get a little deep in the weeds sometimes. I get a vision in my head and I get lost in making sure people see it with twenty words when five will do.
11777571
I certainly hope you're taking more from the praise than anything else! I didn't mind when you went into the weeds. (and if you did, you didn't go too far IMO)
11777707
I do appreciate it, thank you. And criticism is as important and praise. It helps growth, and it’s a good thing to acknowledge. So thank you on both parts.
So is Equestria Girls besides Sunset possible?
11777890
Sorry, I don't exactly understand the question.
11777901
I mean can we use more human characters besides Sunset?
11777904
I mean, yes. Ideally the whole gambit is on offer as this takes place in an entirely different universe with entirely different standards. I'll just make up stories for everyone or anything to exist if need be. Anything to facilitate a bit of fun.
For a second, the title made me think of the South Park movie lol!
11777989
That was the namesake.
mmm, u have a lovely, clever, salacious way with words and turns of phrase...very elegantly sexy!