The Crowning Jewel

Pipp Petals. Princess of Zephyr Heights, second to the throne, owner of a golden headdress studded with a beautiful emerald that she never takes off.

Neither Hitch, Izzy, Sunny, nor Misty have ever inquired about it. Not even Zipp knows why.

But with one misstep, the truth becomes revealed.

An experiment in mixing past and present-tense storytelling.

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Hyper Star #1 · March 25th · 4 · ·

Four pure green eyes, two big and two small, the pupils forming pawprint shapes. A pointy curved horn. Fluffy fur filling my ears. Six large sharp feathers, held together by two metallic bases. A purple exoskeleton along my back. A thick tail with two faded purple antennae curving upwards near their tips.

Gasp, she a furry !

My eyes are shut, but I can still hear the sound of Zipp taking flight, no doubt trying to remove the crown from me herself. In an effort to dodge her, I leap forward, but my body hits the stairs, and from there, all I can feel is unimaginable pain.

Why is Zipp snatching it from her? I don’t think that’s the right thing to do; it obviously makes Pipp uncomfortable and Zipp is the mature one.

"You don't look like a normal changeling, though." Sunny begins to pace around me. "It's like you're an...artificial changeling."

Actually, it sounds like she’s some cat-like creature, I was imagining something like Allura before this was mentioned.

How is Pipp a changeling? Is she adopted? Why wasn’t this addressed? Is she some pony-changeling hybrid? So her mother has been raising a changeling, yet was still afraid of effing unicorns?!

Story was okay, sets up future conflict and stuff and the grammar was decent, but there’s just a few issues I have with the plot. Gets an OKAY.

marmalado

marmalado #2 · March 25th · 1 · ·

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I intentionally left the story open-ended to allow room for potential sequel stories, though I can see how it could have been more neatly wrapped up in an epilogue section of sorts.

As for Zipp, she has a tendency to jump to conclusions a lot and be a bit insensitive when it comes to solving mysteries, as shown with Misty pre-cutie-mark-- hence why she decides to cut right to the chase and tries to tear Pipp's crown off.

Either way, thank you for your feedback. Much appreciated.

Axolotl222

Axolotl222 #3 · March 25th · 2 · ·

Ah, this takes me back to the olden days of the fandom, when little things that most ~~neurotypical~~ people wouldn’t even notice would be spun into these elaborate stories. Also, am I the only one how thinks that insect Pipp sounds adorable ?

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