Brony, Star Wars nut, Former Marine, BA in English, minor in creative writing, OCD and on the Autistic Spectrum
Twilight Sparkle is considered the greatest detective in Equestria. Called to Canterlot to investigate a threat left to museum staff to steal the priceless Mural of Day and Night. When the heist commences, she and her junior detective Spike must find the crooks and more importantly, the missing mural
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Hmm? Based on one of the detective plays in Princess Peach Showtime?
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Yes
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The title name gave it away.
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Fair point
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Cool
This felt extremely rushed, you went from "someone will steal the mural" to "the mural was stolen" to "we caught the baddies" in the span of a 1000 words.
If you’re going to steal something, you steal it as quietly as possible, you don’t go around threatening people that "Hey we’re gonna steal your mural!"
On top of all that, this had a weird... video game or kid's show feel, like "Oh, Detective Sparkle, we’re so glad you’re here!"
This is missing an AU tag and is for some reason anthro, this has no need to be anthro, especially since nobody can even tell it is if it weren’t for the tag. This gets a PRETTY BAD from me, no hard feelings.
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If you have ideas on how to flesh it out more, be my guest, this was inspired by one of the cases for Detective Peach in Princess Peach Showtime. If you have any edits or ideas to add to the story, by all means, shoot me a PM with them