An aspiring Author honing his skills by writing about these silly little ponies. A Fox of few words outside the realm of fiction, unless he gets on a roll with something.
The Great and Powerful Trixie's Traveling Thespians each have a story to tell, something that led them to make the choices that ultimately brought them together. Princess Luna is interested in hearing these stories, both as a diversion from the rigors of royal life and to hopefully solve a small mystery that has arisen regarding the troupe's shyest member.
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Who should start? Trixie or Maggie Pie?
If that's a legit question I'm more interested in Maggie. We've already gotten to know this Trixie reasonable well so I'd love to hear more about your take on Pinkie's sister.
Otherwise, this fic looks to be off to a fair start. The setup is simple and straightforward, but the mystery surrounding Cabbage is already creating a compelling incentive. The story also has no shortage of the casual details (randomly meeting Twilight on the streets, Cadance sitting in on court, and other such) which I always appreciate in your writing. So now the prospect of getting to see a hole assortment of stories within this story has me thoroughly riveted.
1405798 I'd have to agree. Maggie would be more interesting. We know little to none about her, right now. All we can say for certain is that She's Pinkie's sister, and is good with money.
Hm... I am intrigued.
The meeting with Twilight implies more interactions than just Boast Busted, though. Does this share a continuity with Of Two Minds or any other stories?
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Yes, it shares continuity with Of Two Minds.
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I say start with Maggie. Let's get to know these OCs first, then Trixie, then Cabbage to wrap up the mystery.
(I guess Maggie technically isn't an OC, but you know what I mean.)
I would vote Maggie as well.
Oooh this looks like the beginning of an excellent story. Gotta say that i really like what you did with Trixie in your fics and her troupe is not only interesting but very likable, now to brace myself and wait for them updates. Eeeeyup.
And i think i'd vote for Maggie as well, can't go with somepony as great as Trixie from the start.
*hoofshake!*
Dangit! Don't you people realize that some of us have jobs to do?
I kid, of course, but I'll have to find some time to read this chapter.
Well that was fun, it's pretty easy to imagine that Pinkie caused quite a few messes that her sister's got to help clean up.
So Maggie got her cutie mark by inventing Build-A-Bear, but with rocks; that's actually pretty resourceful for a filly.
Anyway, the story was enjoyable, but the writing style was a bit awkward, seeming half flashback and half narration without a good distinction between the two. It gets the information across, but is a little bland and expository at points (though I suppose that could maybe be a bit of the point since story telling isn't really Maggie's strong suit). The whole thing could have also maybe used a few more paragraphs at the end to see what the reactions were to her story. Far from your best work, but in no way bad and I'm still looking forward to more chapters for the other tales the group has to tell.
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The reactions will begin the next chapter.
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I figured as much; I just feel that it would have been better to put them here and then end the chapter on "So who's next?" instead of "And so there you have it". Doing it this way just feels like the resolution has been left hanging unnecessarily in the air.
...but that's my style while this is your story, so I'll reserve any further judgment until I see how you work it all into the opening of the next chapter.
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Ok, you've convinced me; ending with the question "Who's next?" works better. I can just jump into the next tale this way without having to write a focus change first.
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Short & sweet, but also more satisfying I think. Hope I wasn't too much of a nuisance.
Harlequin seems a bit of a jerk though; if he's going to talk like that, I hope he ponies up and goes next.
I haven't forgotten this exists. It's just that this chapter took way too long to make work to my satisfaction.
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I know a thing or two, from personal experience, about chapters taking waayyy too long to write out in a satisfactory manner.
...you have my sympathies.
Favoriting this for later. Picked it out because I recognized the name from the Canterbury tales. Also, I was disappointed to see it wasn't in verse (which I can understand why you wouldn't).
I think this is the best chapter so far, emotional and compelling.
...and so now the plot thickens, well not really, it was fairly obviously always coming to something like this, but I can hardly wait to see how it all actually unfolds.
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Personally, I've seen this building up since... oh, the Twisted Desire events in SSDC. Admittedly, on this side of the 4th wall I have information the characters don't, but if my guess is right, points for building it up well.
For a story this good it has a terribly low amount of readers...seriously.
There's the full secret finally, interesting.
I'm curious about what Luna would have done if Cabbage had revealed that she'd taken part in the invasion.
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She'd have kept her word not to treat Cabbage any differently, but done so with reluctance and a little frustration at being outmaneuvered like that.
You, good sir just made my evening. I saw the title and had to stifle a good bunch of laughter, cause my dad just recently knows i'm a brony, and we went to canterbury last summer, where we went to the museum about the canterbury tales. Anyway, great story, my dad likes it too