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Clue Finder


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A stallion is enjoying an evening at a bar when his behavior catches the attention of two of the apple siblings. Can he talk his way out of the situation? Can he even talk?

A one-shot as a test to see if it's possible to write a character with no dialogue, when others don't strictly understand him. 'Other' because the mute stallion isn't an OC strictly speaking.

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...okay.
If you want my honest opinion...
The ending was anti-climactic.
It was a bit too short.
The stranger is too undeveloped.
You need an editor.
All in all, I think it could use a monkey wrench.
However, I can edit it for you, if you just send me a PM.

Well I liked it for a experiment, good job.

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