Dr. Glowstone Epitaph leads a case-solving firm in Canterlot City; yet something makes them stand out amongst the rest... They read the expressions of the pony's body to determine not only if they are lying, but also what emotions they are expressing and why. Dr. Epitaph was the first to determine the existence of intense feelings that can be expressed with the very slightest of movements as they are talking. He deemed these emotional fractures, and uses them every day even during a normal conversation. Assistants Rose Hearth, Golden Cream, Orange Kindheart, and Gilda the Gryphon all work with him to solve cases. They work with the CIA (Canterlot Intelligence Agency), and the CCPD (Canterlot City Police Department). Join them in this epic series of Dissident Corruption.
[Warning: Some very and not so very offensive content, viewer discretion is advised]
Authors Note: Based off of Lie To Me, one of the greatest shows in existence. It will be very similar to the show via personalities, but entirely ponified. I will have a lot of originality. :)
Cancelled, will publish the first chapter of how far I got incase you want to read...
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Yeah, I gave up. I figured that the plot had an interesting viewpoint, same with Etherial Dawn. That is why I haven't deleted them yet... I am going to co-author a story with Rourke, maybe then we can have some success. :/
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but I was talking about sex/gore tag I thought you did not write things like that
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I don't write clop, I would (if i were to continue writing) use sex and gore as an element to my story to describe case elements that they have to use to solve a crime, (if there is one). I wouldn't write cupcakes descriptive, but just enough to get the reader a good idea of the theme of the scenario and setting.
Heyo! Me here finally. Been wanting to review.
Ok let's begin:
The idea behind almost every fic I have read has been good. This is in the same boat.
Just in the first paragraph there are verbage problems. My recomendation, as I don't have a computer readily avaible, are to read the fic out loud. Reading it out loud will allow you to hear the verbage issues(agreement) but also allow you to hear if sentences sound wrong. Highly recommended.
Some other issues I saw just had to do with gunning it on the description of Golden Cream. Don't just put description out in a line, disperse it across the paragraph.
Its becoming harder to type....screen so small...internet soo bad. message me with any further questions . facebook me actually.
The Evasive SilverTongue
glad to see you're working with Hikari!
Mr Stargaser....we need to get together so I can help you one on one with The Tom Fic!!
Bye now.