Marcus 657 has always been different from his other Spartan brother and sisters. Most are broken at the core; no longer fully human in a sense. But is there still redemption for this Spartan? Can Marcus regain his humanity through old 'gifts' and new friends? And perhaps love in one of the oddest places?
This is my first story, so be nice. If you favorite it, don't forget to press the like button. Thanks for reading!
Editors:
kalash93, boboholic20- Thanks a lot you guys!
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Alt. Title: THIS IS MARCUS! 838: Moar Halo Fics
1776843, Sorry, I liked what i came up with. If it's another fan-fiction though, I've never heard of it.
Oh look, another Halo fic.
Hooray.
It's pretty good. The only downside is the spelling errors, but the story is the important thing not the grammar, so keep up the good work.
lol
Is it wrong to sleep with a frag under my pillow?
1796539 Not at all, especially if you're a Spartan.
1796633 But...I'm CIA....does that count?
1796688 Yup
1796688 and i don't think your allowed to tell me that
1796712 I'm allowed...just no details
1796731 Got it. Never met a guy from the CIA
1796751 Girl
Oh, sorry. Didn't realize
I do sincerely apologize, But there is grammar mistakes, A lot actually. I do not mean to be a grammar Nazi in all I just want to help a fellow writer get better.
1816113, Continue, I'm happy to hear them.
1796770Do you sleep with a pistol to?
Hmmm short chapters 5/5 mustaches
1837452 I do enjoy a good mustache
In a short guess (from all the other halo fics that i've read) A pack of timber wolves pounce out of the bushes. Out numbered by the 100(s) and against all odds he manages too kill them all either by gun or fist to paw slow motion and very graphical description. And is either is left badly wounded or just a scratch. I do apologize but after reading four halo/MlP fiction the all appear the same in that way.
1838149 Strange, that's not what happens at all
1839419
Sorry about that, Seeing your Fic, May be a eye opening for me. I read four halo Fictions and they all basically go in that 'One Direction' But john117 I know things will come around in this Fic, I can feel it. I mean no disrespect towards you other author and readers.
1842544 Thank you very much, and no insult was taken, But you must understand that not everything can be the same. Keep an open mind, love and tolerate. Thank you for reading though
Not the worst I've ever seen, but certainly not the best.
Tell you what; I'll abstain from saying anything negative about it because it looks like you put a decent amount of time into it...you show potential.
If they jump him I'm gonna be pissed.
1853731 i would think that a round house kick to the face from a Spartan would deter anyone from attempting such an act
1854979 ... you have a point thar...
I would say first post, but I don't really feel like it.... eeeeEEEHHHH III Don't know what to doooo....
I thought rarity would just faint from looking at the "fashion of the armor"
Oh well scaring here to death is more fun
Need more, please I'm gonna cry.
GEEZUS!!! GOHD, their xenophobia is so IRRITATING!! D:<
aaw that's cute (`・ω・` )
aaw c:
1846673 How is it so fare?
Soooo many typos they stair? Yeah I laughed at that Good story so far
this is the order i was like.....
Feel free to call me a nitpicker, but DAYUM those Spartans must be more superhuman than I thought if Marcus covered 20km in 30 minutes. He'd have to be running at least 40km/h all the way.
1883552 ... okay?? ヽ('ー`)ノ
:T
obviously doesn't have the sprint ability active, not that it would help much.
1885824 he'll be needing the active camo later on in the story
i think it was supposed to be knew
You have a certain problem here. You had it at least twice were you said dint when it should be didn't. Also when you were trying to say that Marcus had one foal under each arm you said 'had tone under each arm'. A little pointer that I use that can catch more errors than the sites lower grade one would be to use Document Word Pad or Microsoft Office Word then copy paste it onto the area where you put the chapter. This will help catch a few more of those mistakes although the best way to stop it completely (or near enough) would be to get an editor or proof reader.
1887824 thank you
I'll try harder to chatch these and fix those that I can when I can
its Aura not ora, just thought you ought to know *passes out*
dieing not dyeing, to dye something is to color it/stain it