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Unfamiliar surroundings, unfamiliar everything, really. Adaptation is key, ingenuity will keep you alive.
Natives that can't decide whether to like you or not? Okay. Survival in a new environment? Alright. Adapting to a new form? No problem. Blending into a new culture? ...maybe not so much.
Cover art courtesy of DiscordTheTrollest on DA.
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More. Do not ask for any other reason. Just MOAR.
136165
Sure thing. Maybe now they'll let the damn story go through...
Nice. I was just thinking why no one ever turned into a gryphon in these stories.
waits for more.
Oh for the love of Equestria more! This is the first gryphon-related story I've read and you have a really good writing style.
Also, nice portrayal of Dash.
138941
Oh, you can count on it. Chapter 4 may or may not be up tonight.
Thanks for your kind words, they keep me going!
I think you've done a decent Dash so far. Main characteristics seem to be down, mostly need to know how to write brash.
You might want to consider writing with Rainbow Dash more just because of her (comparatively) vast previous experience with gryphons (Gilda).
Glorious. Keep up the good work.
I am enjoying your Fluttershy quite a bit. I hope she has a good sized role in the story.
The almighty stare!
By the way, is the guy that got hit from Britian? Or is he just that polite? (its cool either way)
Story seems to be very well written, and I enjoy the new twist on an old premise (dead human waking up as a griffon instead of a pony).
However, I do have a few concerns about the fic so far, all of which are related to one overarching question Why does Albus show little to no curiosity as to how he ended up in Equestria (and in a different body no less). I understand that he isn't too upset by the situation considering, you know, his death... But he doesn't even question it at all. If I found myself in such a situation (or really, any reasonable, inquisitive person), this would be the my primary concern. There are so many questions to be asked: Did I actually die? Is this the afterlife? If so, where are the other dead humans? If not, then how did I end up here? Why am I a griffon? Where did my old body go? Is THIS my old body, just changed? Or did I unwittingly steal someone else's body? These are kind of important questions here.
Personally, I can't understand why he doesn't just tell someone of his predicament, or at least ask more general questions about his situation (that is, try to figure out what happened subtly, rather than flat out ask).
I just can't understand why Albus seems to have absolutely no curiosity about anything whatsoever.
144731
Damn it, you're right.
Regardless, I'll see about addressing this in the future, I hadn't really thought about it, to be honest.
I can't really talk about my plans to deal with this problem without giving too much away, but suffice to say it'll come up. Thanks to you.
Though, truthfully, so far I've been having him try to find out other things that, in my mind (and therefor Albus'), take a bit of priority over questions that don't have definitive answers (as far as he knows). Case in point, the books he checked out.
On that note, your feedback is both appreciated and fair, and has been (obviously) taken under consideration.
Thank you for reading and reviewing!
(Other people, this is what I mean by telling me what I'm doing wrong. Get on it.
)
Huh.....Better than mine....Insta fav
Sounds good... now if only there was a fic on a person turning into a diamond dog.... Haven't seen many that stray away from just turning into a pony which is a nice breath of fresh air.
Seems like its going good so far... silver corral.... any relation to golden corral?
To me it seems more like Albus has gotten past the denial stage of that he likely died and is more likely accepting the fact that he is going to be stuck as a Griffon. And also he doesn't seem like he was a brony so its not like he would know anything about Equestria.
146624
Silver Corral. Golden Corral.
Find the joke.
144756
I say that everyone think differently. Some might have the existential questions immediately bug them, others might suddenly get hit by it after a few days, and yada yada yada. Anyways, this is definitely above the 90%+ of HiE fics that are really, really bad, and I'm enjoying it quite a bit. Thank you!
So, uh, attempting to do some actual criticism... I think you have the Mane 6 down really well so far, so much that I just like reading them. I'm still waiting for the inevitable AWKWARD MOMENTS, but I'm enjoying the everything else too.
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Grazie, grazie.
On the subject of "AWKWARD MOMENTS", I don't know yet. I'm taking a small break for the moment to determine where I want to go with this story, but afterwards... we'll see.
Molti grazie for the comment, amico. (Because Italian is cooler than Spanish.)
i am finally getting to this after promising to read it.
155500
Took ya long enough. :V
"HINT HINT"
I'm quite enjoying this. Albus' strategy and reactions are a bit different than what I expect mine would be, but are consistent and quite believable (and probably safer, too). That, and he's not being a complete moron about things.
This story has been awesome so far.
>>MyLittleBurger
....I now really want someone to make a HiE in which the main character becomes a diamond dog.
I mean really, really want to see that be written.
MOAR /troll
I am also quite enjoying this.... Some of Albus' reactions seem similar to what I would do.... granted to be honest I am sort of mellow so I would likely show little to no inconvenience at being stuck in a land of talking ponies...
FlutterxVires all the way.
174548 Yeeaah, shipping.
I may or may not go with that. I'm perfectly capable of writing romance, but I don't know if I want my story to go in that direction yet.
>Vires foreveralone.jpg
>no shipment in one of my favorite fanfics.
Although, that's not my decision to make.
I say yaaay shipping.... fluttershy as a huggable pillow....
174654 Forever alone. :<
You're outvoted at the moment, champ.
174698 Flutterpillows are the best.
I say yes to the FlutterxVires.
Why?
Because you actually put a pace to the romance that makes it cute and funny.....better than the other fics that make the Mane six all whores.
Plus you could add more plot with the whole GriffienXPony relationship and how the other ponies and griffins react to the odd couple. Hell throw Gilda in and make her a prissy racist bitch trying to steal Vires away from Fluttershy and then...catfight!!!!! (Just for shits and giggles)
Also are all Griffins assholes in equeastria? Because it seems that everypony is surprised when Viser acts like a reasonable man.
All and all though I vote for the ship but do what you want....It's not like I could come over to your house and kidnap you and throw you in a hole somewhere and make you type out random shipping stories...........Oh- yes I forgot to tell you......You left your back door unlocked, so make sure its locked next time!!! You don't want some freak in your house.
176714 Hooray legitimate feedback~
Your points... me gusta. I appreciate that people are enjoying my 'romance' (even if it's not actually romance yet...), and... I may write more. I feel myself leaning towards it.
I could totally see Gilda doing that, but I doubt I would write it like that. I mean, it's totally one-sided.
Fluttershy would win without even trying.
He's not a reasonable man, he's a reasonable gryphon. And it depends on the individual, just like everything else.
And, finally, I doubt you would need to go to such lengths to get me to write shipping. Maybe for a clop/slopfic or grimdark fic, but I have no qualms with legitimate romance.
Until next time, ta ta~
176732
oh god please not a clopfic there are enough of those.
anyway another point is you don't have to make the story lean that way, just make it a side plot.
Excellent
179102
indeed
Superb story! I especially loved the human vs. gryphon idea. I am sorry but I just cannot offer you any feedback as I cannot think of anything I would change. In short: MOAR!!!
the yellow text. IT BURNS
great chapter, looking forward to more.
195315
Sorry, that was done with the 'Dark' background in mind, not the 'Light' one. If nothing else, you could just highlight it, right?
Besides, Fluttershy is yellow. Her writing is yellow. It works. Sort of.
**Yes. Yes I did.
keel? How would that be pronounced? Like in I keel you? Kill? or maybe kel....? Though didn't know that was a structure in their chest....
195402
As in Achmed the Dead Terrorist.
I KEEEEEEEL YOUUUUU
195402 'Tis a long "E", so, keel as in keel, the part of a boat it's named for. The boat usage is actually considered the oldest written English word, though it was written "cyulae" at the time, in faux-Latin as the monks insisted on doing back then.
To steal a phrase from Dash, "I'm an egghead!"
Edit: Ninja'd D:
195440
Although, your explanation was much more in-depth than mine.
Your assitance is much appreciated, even if I did steal the response from you.
COOOOL story. MOAR!!!, MOAR, I say!!!!!!
fantastic
>started talking in a manner much like a certain pink party pony.
This doesn't work terribly well. The way this story is being written is from his point of view. And he hasn't seen Pinkie, let alone know how she speaks.
Say it was rapid-fire, or breathlessly gushed, something along those lines. Not making a reference to someone he has never met.
219415
I'm going to respond to this exactly how I did on FF.net; ready?
"Keep in mind that while this story is and will be told largely through the perspective of one Albus Vires, it is still in the 3rd person and therefor the narration does not rely solely on his knowledge; meaning that the 'pink party pony' was referenced by the narrator (me), and not the protagonist."
And done. Good day.
Omellete du fromage
The only french I know. Thank you Dexter.
Also, nice to see a plot forming.
227722
Especially because I suck with plot...
I MEAN
Uh, yeah. I had this planned all along. From the beginning, even.
Also, Fancy- I mean, French is weird.
227722
Literally means 'Omlette of cheese'...