(Attention. This story contains colored dialog text that is necessary to the telling of this story. If you do not like reading colored text then this story is not for you.)
Hello, Flare here. I started this story a while ago and decided I would finally finish the first chapter. The normal type is the story, but it is written as Midnight telling the story to her daughters and Twilight and Rainbow Dash. it will be interrupted bu questions and comments from the listeners. The interruptions will be italic and color coded for the 5 characters. the normal story will be separated from the questions and comments so there will be no confusion. Please give this story a chance before automatically down voting. I will adjust tags and such as needed as more of the story is written.
..... She said she would meet us here right?
I don't get it, she's never tardy.
I'M HERE I'm here... just in time too by the looks of it.
Ok, Luna and Celestia will join us later and Blue Thunder said he might drop by..... Twilight, you might want to get comfortable, you to Rainbow Dash... this is a very long story with many twists and turns...
This is the story of my life.
Curse my family.... I must attend to something but here is the first part of the first chapter. Will finish this chapter later. comments welcome.
You... Kinda ruined the ending of the story with the first paragraph...
So? It's awesome!
*cough*suckup*cough*
Thank you red...
it's a narrative...
good so far looking forward to update
Hey, I love it! Keep going, I am interested!
1887620 Dude... our profile pics are almost teh same... Mine could be the father of yours....
2585504 It has been about 16 hours and it still hasn't cleared moderation... this is kinda annoying. Whatever, glad you like it.
2585701 It, for me at least, takes about a day. Oh, welcome back!
2585704 That time seems about right, however it worrys me on this story because i'm only 50% sure it will pass because of the commentary format i have it in. I don't know if that breaks the green text rule or not.
2585794 hmmmm, you might be right..... Well, if it doesn't pass this way, switch the writing and try that. Make them talk in a normal format if it does not work
Major turnoff right here: Coloured text. Hard to read, adds nothing. Tag that dialogue, mayt!
2586488 I get your point about it being hard to read for some but it is necessary for the story as this is based off an RP that has been ongoing for months now that revolves around colored text. Thank you for the feedback
good, but you should choose darker colors, yellow was really hard to read, but good altogether
2587477 hmmmmm, you may be right, any suggestions for Celestia?
1886033 BTW mister grammar nazi, i must thank you. I usually get a million and one complaints about spelling and such, but i do believe you have changed me for the better.
2588650
well I would suggest white, but that's kind of, beside the point hehe, an emerald green would be good mostly because I don't think any other character would use it, and she has two shades of green/blueish green in her hair so I think it would fit well for her
2588682
Changed.
....... i comment to much on my own stories. I guess i just like interacting with my readers. Sorry for spamming my own comments.
as you can tell im usually happy.
2588723
i can read it now :D
I give you three
2588673
No problem
DeFlare... I have no valid comment here.
That's unusual..
2589900 .............. red has no comment?
Oh Celestia, the end is nigh.....
2585504 *gasp* dad?
2591825 ... *blushes*.. i... i guess that makes me your mother..... well.... stepmother.....
I would like you to meet Junebug. Changling female and wife of Axius.
f-future wife...
Hmmmm... i sense another rp beginning.
2585807 would you like to start another blog for this?
2593429 wow i'm meeting all sorts of family today
2591825 By the gods, son! It is you! *hugs him* yes, this Changeling is my wife, but only because I love her. She is unlike the others. She is kind, and loving, and caring. She has already been a good mother to your baby sister.
2593429 nah, that's what comment sections are for lol
2598976 its awesome to finally have a family
2600422 It is, my son. *a small rust colored dragon-winged filly with a blond mane appears*
Selena: I'm Selena. Who you? *she asks you*
Sorry. This is Selena, your little sister.
2604236 i have a sister too umm.. excuse me please
*shoots into the air and screams in joy*
2605031 Selena: *follows and laughs. stops and looks like she is going to be sick*
*looks at her* uh oh! *flies up and tackles him out of the way as Selena breathes fire where he was flying* Sorry. She and her older brother, also your older brother, have special talents unlike ponies: she breathes fire, and Draco shape shifts.
Selena: *flies over* sorry big brodur *hugs him*
*smiles* it seems she likes you.
Selena: *looks at you* What name?
Go ahead, tell her your name.
2605079 oh right my name is Crimson
nice to meet you
2605097 Selena: Crimson! *looks behind him and squeals* big brodur's back! *you turn and see a medium-sized green furred, brown spotted pony with dragon's wings, fangs, and lizard's eyes. he flies over to you and speaks with a mellow tone*
Draco: Aye little lass. *looks at you* Little brother, so glad to see you once again *hugs him* I'm your older brother, 1st Lt Draco Flare, commander of the Special Forces Squadron in the Lunar Army. And, loving husband to the Princess Luna.
Luna: *appears on Draco's back, her front hooves encircling his neck* Yes, yes he is.
Selena: So you big sister?
Luna: yes we are Selena. *Selena squeals and hugs Luna as I hover next to you*
So Crimson, how does it feel to not only be reconnected to your family, but to know that you are now a Prince?
2605145 three words: BEST FAMILY EVER!!!
2605165 *smiles* yes, I guess you can say that. You have a fire breather for a little sister, a shape-shifting older brother who is a soldier, a step-sister who is the Lunar Princess, a mother who is a Changeling, a father who is a king. There is one more, and she should be here..... *buzzing is heard* now *a small Changeling filly with 4 wings appears and she hovers next to them*
Firefly: hiya, I'm Firefly, dual winged Changeling Ace. Creator of the Changeling Fireboom. Want to see it?
You should let her, it is pretty amazing.
2605201 please go right ahead
2605222 Firefly: Aw yeah! *looks at Luna* raise the moon please? *Luna nods and raises the moon, engulfing the world in darkness* The Fireboom is 20% cooler in the dark. *flies 5 miles above us. starts to nosedive, beating the dual set of wings faster and faster as a little jet of green fire erupts from her horn. a second later, she breaks the sound barrier, sending a large wave of green fire outwards alongside the loud boom. The fire changes colors, from green to yellow, than to blue, than to orange, than purple, than red before disappearing completely, spreading out in the night sky, making the stars shine brighter. returns to Crimson's side* And that was the Fireboom, a Firefly original.
*we all clap* That was amazing Firefly!
2605248 *stands there speechless from the awesomeness*
2605261 Firefly: *looks at him* yeah, everypony does that when they see it for the first time up close.
2605274 i can see why
*eye twitch*
2605284 Firefly: *looks at his eye* are you alright?
Maybe I should explain. Firefly is an orphan. Draco found her mother, an old friend of his who passed from this life unto the next, on the front steps of his Forge. She, Firefly's mother, died there, so Draco has been caring for her ever since.
Firefly: I'm his assistant in Forging and Crafting and Enchanting!
2605303 wow well its a good thing you have such a great family then
and as for the eye its a little hard to explain
2605321 Firefly: Look at our family: you have an alicorn who tried to enslave the entire planet and bind them to a world of darkness, a dragon winged stallion who can shapeshift, a 2nd dragon winged pony, this one a filly, who can breathe fire, a Changeling who hid amongst the ponies in Ponyville for many years, an Alion, or alicorn/dragon pony hybrid, who has been asleep for a thousand years due to a curse, adn just witnessed a fireboom done by a Changeling with 4 wings. I think we can handle an explanation of an eye twitch
2605343 ok i guess you can add a pony with a split personality of a psychopathic murder to that list
2605363 *looks confused* is that it? That is nothing. *looks around* now where is she? *a black alicorn with a clear colored mane is behind him*
Raven: BOO! *I jump and Raven laughs* Got you brother!
Gah! sorry, Crimson, this is your Aunt, Raven Spectre. She is one of those odd ponies. She has attempted suicide, killed her father and her husband, and kicked Celestia's flank in a magic duel.
Raven: I'm also wanted for murder and kidnapping in Griffonland
2605387 nice to meet you and try over 100 counts of unsolved murder in several of the kingdoms but i don't think i can top beating Celestia
2605387>>2605408 {wow.... ive really been out of it havent i. lol ]
2605408 Raven: *smiles* than I guess I win than. When I was just 10 years old, my foster mom got into a bit of trouble with Celestia, so I did what any 10 year old filly owuld do: I challenged her to a magic fight. *laughs* man, did she get her flank KICKED! I knocked her left and right with my ice magic, kicked her with my hooves. If you look closely at her neck, there is a scar there from when I bit her.
*I nod* Aye, your aunt is telling the truth
2609159 (only a little lol)
2609394 *pictures fight* *starts rolling on the floor laughing*
2611096 Raven: *growls at you* not funny kid, she's the reason I'm half mechanical over here. My wings, eyes, and 2 of my legs were destroyed in that fight.
It's a touchy subject for her
2614226
oh i'm so sorry plea-
*starts to violently shake and scream*
* maniacal laughter*