3 887 Statistics Blog Posts Download .txt Download .html Download .epub Report Story T Michael. Arc angel MLP: FiMRomanceAdventureCelestiaLunaOCNightmare MoonMain 6 Last of his family and Luna as his mother. Whats gonna happen? Check it out and let me know what you think. More Less Chapters (5) Gamble · 30th Jan 2012 · 1,775 words 1,775 Download .txt Download .html Law and Responsiblites · 25th Jan 2012 · 1,371 words 1,371 Download .txt Download .html A day in the life · 26th Jan 2012 · 1,090 words 1,090 Download .txt Download .html Mother’s week · 27th Jan 2012 · 2,651 words 2,651 Download .txt Download .html Mother’s week 2-3 · 28th Jan 2012 · 4,670 words 4,670 Download .txt Download .html Save Chapter Order
You need to start using speech marks for dialogue...
I see your using speech marks more often but not for all of the dialogue. Other than that I like this story so far.
Also the fuck?: Oh how sweet of you, such a genital colt you are
The correct spelling should be gentlecolt. I had a very wierd picture created in my mind because of that one sentence.
I would like to point out there are quite a few spelling mistakes. I would point them all out but i'm being lazy today.
Try to fix these problems if possible.
Heh, no problem. I will go over your chapters for spelling mistakes and such and then message you the results if you want (When I get home of course).