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*Prologue
Also, "Nocturne" is supposed to be a musical composition(commonly misconceived as art in general.). I think it has something to do with night, so I guess it kinda fits.
Also, I'd suggest working on grammar a bit. Like, formatting, and dialogue especially. aside from these things, good story...
EDIT:
Also, this did progress quite quickly for such a short chapter. Try adding from other kinds of plot development, give background, use sensory, etc.
2085701 The only spell correction over the internet that has actually helped me, thanks.
This interpretation of Nightmare Moon has caught my interests.
I will read this on one condition: you start a new line for every speaker. Please. I beg you!
Mmm, better. I do enjoy a good Nightmare Moon story, so I will keep my eye on this.