In order to prove to Vinyl, Pinkie Pie, Rainbow Dash, and Octavia that the TARDIS can actually travel in time, the Doctor and Derpy travel with them twenty years into Ponyville's past. They first stop at SugarCube corner to find nefarious creatures lurking in the basement, waiting to strike. The first in a series of DerpDoctor, PinkieDash, and VinylTavia adventures through time and space as we enter the strange new world of Doctor Whooves and his entourage.
Did I just see my top three ships? Awesome.
This was a pretty good story idea overall, but you need to work on your spacing.
Example:
The Doctor waved, "Hello."
"Vinyl!" Pinkie whispered loudly.
"Yeah?" Vinyl was still staring at the Doctor.
"He's REAL!" Pinkie was still whispering in her loud tone.
Should look something more like this:
The Doctor waved, "Hello."
"Vinyl!" Pinkie whispered loudly.
"Yeah?" Vinyl was still staring at the Doctor.
"He's REAL!" Pinkie was still whispering in her loud tone.
It's easier on the eyes and looks a lot better. Upvote to balance
More. Being a Whovian myself, I love Doctor Whooves stories.
I might just start watching Doctor who after reading this series.
So many references!
Hello Sweetie line and Time Crash reference!