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Coils in a Clock

I never really needed you. I only wanted you. Right, right?

Tell me I just didn't want your love to keep the cold away.

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vazak

vazak #1 · Jun 26th, 2013 · · ·

This was quite a good read, there were some problems, but also many positives to balance it out. A problem I feel was that I don't know this situation that well or these characters, & even the one's I do know, I don't know them as they are now and I lack the necessary context & development of both the characters and the situation which makes it harder to relate to or sympathize with them. In the same vein, I found the idea fascinating and I very much liked the ending and how they each individually chose to leave as well as the characters reaction and the description of the scene. There were some spelling errors as well, but the dialogue was very well done and the character grief came through very well, I also liked much of the subtle scene/world building done in the conversations. Overall I thought this was a very good story; I hope this review is of some use and not rude, if it was I apologize.