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As the Princess' personal protege, Twilight Sparkle is expected to, one day, take on a role of great leadership in the country of Equestria. However, Twilght makes a discovery that places a fork in her path. Will Twilight repress part of herself to become a leader to her people, or will she choose to answer the call of her heart?
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TwiPie? *sighs* This interests me, even though I hate TwiPie.
Hey, this was great!
Sweet, simple and heartwarming, I really liked it!
Have some stars, and a follower, it's the least I can do.
It's so sweet that they got back together.
It is a good story, though it is deep I find it that even if the feelings are there it just did not hit me as deep as other stories did, like "my little dashie" or "brotherly bonds" must be me because I like descriptive fics against anything else, even so the process of writing was great and the poem was a good touch at the end.
Even so I loved it.
Haha! Oh Pinkie . . .
To the point and well-written. Solid four stars.
"To my most beloved student,
I do not read those. Don't know what you're talking about. I would never~!
Sincerely,
<strike>Princess Mol</strike>Princess Celestia
Have some stars. That was rather well done.
Very well done. I enjoyed the letter approach to the story as it allowed you to forego having to utilize base detail too often and kept the flow up. I've always imagined that Equestria is perfectly accepting of homosexuality seeing as how about 80% of the population is of a specific gender, but after reading the Author's note, I understand why you made that decision.
Great job.
I LOVED "Dear Mr. Henshaw", and I still do to this very day! I own that book and everything! Very, very clever idea; I loved it!
This was beautiful, from start to finish. I think the poem was the perfect way to end it as well.
Regarding some other comments: This one won't strike as deep in as many readers as My Little Dashie or the like, as it concerns very specific aspects shared by a smaller range of reader - and has a much more uplifting ending, which is a very pleasant change - but it is no less valid for that.
It is a great piece, thank you for sharing it with us.
Beutiful... Really liked it. Oh and don't take out the poem.
I literally made an account to comment on this story.
I would like to complement you on this master piece you have created. I would also like to point out that the style that you wrote it in drastically made it better than other stories I've read. Making it a traditional story would most likely have made it worse (the letter format really is what gave this story this charm (( Though it still would have been really good))). You are an excellent writer, Never stop.
Twinkie Pie is 2nd best pairing.
But, yeah. This was beautiful. Very in-character, well-written and poetic. Very, very good and I'll be keeping an eye on you as an author.
That was fantastic sir, i very much enjoyed reading it. Also i wish good luck to your friend and any partners she has in future. **sigh** i only wish my friends were as supportive
Hello everyone! I want to thank you all very, very much. Before I finished this story, I had a lot of doubt about my writing ability. I used to have a lot of confidence in the work that I did, but unfortunate turns made me doubt if I could actually deliver the depth of emotion I have always wanted to bring across in my writing. Many of the works that I have done, previous to this one, had no depth whatsoever, and it sort of turned me off of writing for a while.
I just signed off of my computer right as the story was approved, and I decided to look on the site just to see how the story was doing. I never imagined so many people would read it. I hope all that read the story enjoyed it, and maybe helped someone else along the way. Below I have responded to your comments (the ones I have recieved at the time I am writing this).
<<Mobius>> Thank you, I am really happy this interested you!
<<Taranasaurus0.0>> I am really happy that you felt the story was heartwarming. That was what I was trying to do with this story, and it really warms my heart to hear someone say that!
Thank you for the follow and the stars, I will add them to my special star collection!
<<Diamond Sparkle>> Thank you diamond! This story could have had a sad ending, but I am a sucker for happy endings. That doesn't mean that all my stories have happy endings, but I wanted this one to be uplifting because I wanted the friend that I wrote it for to feel happy after reading it.
<<Frutineo>> I am really glad that you enjoyed the style in which I wrote the story. To be honest, I was really close to rewriting this story as a normal story. But I liked the idea of writing a story told through letters and had always wanted to try it, so I gave it a go. I really enjoy descriptive fics too, because they can help pull you into a story, though too much description can bog down a story. I am really happy you liked the story, thank you so much!
<<MacAttack>> Thank you very much Mac, that means a lot!
<<RaptorCalloftheShadows>> Uh oh, Twilight better be careful during her visit to the castle, Princess Mol..uhh Celestia might want revenge on her student for calling her out!
<<Sour Grapes>> Thank you very much for the stars, I will also add those to my collection. If I am not careful I will need to build a new star case! Thank you very much for the follow as well, that means a lot.
<<SteelEagle>> That is how I imagine Equestria is as well! Since there are so many mares, you figure that relationships between two mares would be very common and accepted. I am really glad you enjoyed the story, thank you!
<<Tailslover13>> Wow so I am not the only person that has heard of that book!! Dear Mr. Henshaw is an awesome book, and my favorite novel by Beverly Cleary! I think of all her works it is the deepest, which is why it made such an impact on me. I am really happy you liked the way the story was done. I don't know if I am clever, but I greatly appreciate the thought!
<<Scorchedwing>> Thank you very much for your kind words. I am happy you enjoyed it! I never really thought of my work as beautiful before, but that is what I strive for, and I am happy that you saw it as such. I was very unsure about the poem. After I finished the story, the idea just came to me to write the poem. Once I finished it I thought it was cliche, but I wanted to give it a chance. I am happy you liked it! It's funny when you mention select audiences, because when I wrote this story, it was for a VERY select audience, the person I mentioned in the author's notes. I wrote this for her because she likes MLP and Pinkie Pie and Twilight are her favorite characters. So I chose those characters to tell this story. I wanted the story to have an uplifting ending because I wanted my friend to feel happy after she read the story. It was my honor to share it with you, and everyone else.
<<Banksyt>> Thank you so much banksyt, and from the other comments given the poem will stay in place. I am very happy you felt the story was beautiful!
<<Sean the Brony>> Sean I'm honored that you made an account just to comment on my story! I am really happy you liked the story's format! Again, I was really unsure about the style. I don't know about being a masterpiece, but I am very, very happy that this story inspired you enough to create an account just to comment on it.
<<SSJ5Gogetenks>> Hey SSJ! I had wondered whether or not I had captured the characters of Twilight and Princess Celestia in this story. Writing from the point of view of another character, versus one that I had created, has always been hard for me. I'm happy that you thought I wrote both in character. Thanks for keeping an eye out on me, I guess I had better start looking my best!!
<<Agent Brony>> I am very happy you enjoyed the story AB! I will certainly pass on the well wishes. I am very sorry that your friends are not supportive of your decision to be who you are. But hang in there, it is a very tough road, but it's worth it in the end. I have a couple of friends who have gone down that path, and they are both happier for it :) It's my hope that the message in this story, and in other stories like it, reaches those that are in situations such as yours.
Time for Simon Cowell to enter the building!
*reads it* What can i criticize? Here we go:
Spelling-wise: "areal" should be "arial" uh. uh . . . Damnit! I don't see anything else!
Compliments. This might be a long paragraph.
You seem to have the character of everypony you wrote about completely under control: Celestia, Twilight, Pinkie, Spike and even Rainbow Dash. However, for future stories, your writing style leaves me concerned how you would handle Applejack.
The last letter and the poem seem to go together really well; the poem adds a nice last touch.
Everything in this story seems realistic and probable. I can so see Twilight in a hospital bed "bedraggled, bleary eyed, with patches of fur missing." I can so see Twilight being concerned over her love for Pinkie Pie. I can so see Twilight lying to the Princess in her letters about true love.
I wish I could make this longer . . .
Overall, great story, though that spelling mistake make take you down from a 5 to a 2.5 . . .
Just kidding! 5/5
Very nicely done!
The purity of their love is heartwarming.
It was very good! :) I love how you have the characters characterized through actions and not so much words. Great job, I really enjoyed reading it. :)
My only criticism is the sheer number of ways twilight interjects the word "friend" to cover for who she means.
Yes, I get it, Twilight feels conflicted and wants to talk about this pony without directly referencing the name or gender but she is well read, she could come up with a few different gender neutral terms. 
You have 55 instances of the word friend in this fic 
even for a scholar of friendship thats a bit much 
other than that I can only offer my stars and tracking, I will be watching for more. well done brony
Manly tears of joy have been shed
Now shut up and take my stars
Wonderful story I'm really glad I read this. Enjoy 5 stars.
Not as deep as My Little Dashie *sniffle* *sniffle* but just as heart warming.
Cheers SL, my friends may not be as supportive as i would like them to be, but at least there not "Oh god your bi, your gunna try and bone me, get away" at least there not like that, the people who are however i just love and tolerate the hell out of them, and get on with my life.
A simple and wonderful story that tugged at my heart and made me want to cry with Twilight. I think I might to draw several of these pairings just because ^_~
Aww.... So beautiful. :D I felt so sad when Pinkie Pie didn't take it well at all and Twilight started becoming depressed.. But it ended quite happily in the end
Awesome work! And don't take off the poem, it fits just right.
5 Stars to you!
i find no attraction towards males but i do towards one of my female friends i am not sure if it is just hormones or if it is true love i am just confused and i have no clue what to do i dunno this is just how i have been feeling and it feels nice to get it off my chest even if it is to people i never have or will meet
<<RandomExpert781>> Argh you have caught me Random! I swear no matter how many times I edit a story I always miss one or two things!
Thank you for pointing that out though! I shall go back and fix it. I am very happy you thought I wrote those ponies in character, I always felt that I had difficulty staying in character when I wrote fanfiction. I am happy this turned out to be a strong point in this story! I'm really happy you liked the story and it honors me that you could see this being possible for the characters for the characters to react this way, given the situation. Thank you for your kind comments!
<<DawnFade>> Thank you very much! I'm really happy I was able to capture love in this piece (which can be really hard to do sometimes).
<<Clonetrooperkev>> Thank you so much, I plan to write more. About what, I'm not sure yet, but I plan to write more!
<<Inumaru12>> Thank you Inu, I try to charactarize the characters through what they do. IT was kind of hard to do in this story since it was told through letters.
<<Steel Resolve>> You make a valid point. I had so much difficulty finding a way for Twilight to hide Pinkie's identity. I think she would have probably found a better way than I did it. I couldn't think of a way she could do that though. Hopefully I could find some other bronies to talk about stories with and find ways to do that in the future.
<<primalcorn1>> Thank you for your stars, now here is a many rag to wipe those manly tears!
<<sillyfillybowilly>> Thanks SillyFilly! I love your name, it reminds me of the time in third grade when I played the name game with the name Chuck
<<PonyofTacos>> Wow! I never thought that My Little Dashie would be mentioned in the comments of a story I wrote. I am really happy you found it just as heart warming! That warms my heart
But you are right, I don't feel it's as deep as that story either. A little side note about MLD. Before I read that story, I had almost lost all hope in my writing. A friend of mine directed me toward the story (this was before I ever knew about MLP) and told me to read it. I read that story and was blown away. It made me see that it was possible for me to write stories full of emotion again, I just needed to work at it. MLD will always have a special place in my heart because it gave me hope as a writer again.
<<Agent Brony>> It's funny AB, because that is the best way that you can handle people like that. Give them the Fluttershy treatment, anti-troll them (I think that counts as an anti-troll). You'll be surprised at how fast that takes the steam out of their system. But that is the best thing you can do, as they say, a rolling stone gathers no moss.
<<Sketch Knight>> I am honored that my story moved you Sketch, and even moreso if my story made you want to draw! Music and art inspires me all of the time
I would love to see some of your work!
<<Gyrofest>> Thank you so much Gyro!! Hearing that means a lot to me! I am very glad that you liked the poem.
<<MacDerpy>> Hey MacDerpy! I don't know much about your situation, so I can't really make a judgement. It may be that you have an emotional attachment toward your friend, and have not had an emotional attachment toward another male, which is why you feel that way. Or, you may just not like guys.
A lot of it may depend on your age. If you are young (very early to mid teens), these feelings are not all that uncommon. However, if you are a little older and find that these feelings persist, it may just be that you like girls. If you need someone to talk to, I can help point you toward websites that have people you can talk to live. In any case, I am really happy that you liked my story and that it helped relieve any pressure you may feel.
All my hearts, have them.
I remember loving that book, though my memory is poor enough that I don't remember why I did. Congratulations and good luck to your friend, and, do keep the poem. I liked it. ....My only real complaint is i'm not a big fan of Twilight/Pinkie, but it is what works best for this, as my preferred Twilight pairings would not have worked. Well done, sir or madam. Carry your head high, and your glasscutter proudly.
the cakes are
holes
~yay
awesome story
thare are not enufe twinkie pie storys like this (good)
bad at spelling
<<Mirenheart>> I will be honored to take your hearts! I will frame them and put them above my bed!
<<Traveler7>> Wow! I am surprised so many people liked Dear Mr. Henshaw. That book had an impact on my young life, and it was really hard for me to forget. Beverly Cleary, its writer, was anamazing children's book author. I read so many books of hers when I was a kid it was crazy! As far as Twilight/Pinkie goes, I am not sure how realistic they would be as a couple. Though I have to say that Twilight is Probably one of the few mane 6 who could have the mental fortitude to outlast her hyperness. Fluttershy could probably work well with her, and Rainbow Dash could work well too since both of them are very active. Though a lot of relationships, if both partners love each other, and work at it, can work out.
<<Zombie-kitty>> Thank you very much Zombie! I am really happy that you liked this pairing, I felt that it would work the best for this particular instance. Don't worry about being bad at spelling. When I initially wrote this story, it was on wordpad. I copy pasted the story into MS Word and found 10 misspellings
About Mr. Cake's reaction. From what I have seen in the show, the cakes probably love Pinkie like a daughter. When someone hurts your child, for no matter what reason, you instantly will want to protect your child, which might cause you to lash out or become overly protective (this isn't always true but it's just what I have seen). Mr. Cake's reaction was just out of parental love than spite for Twilight. I think that even if her and Pinkie would not have gotten back together, he (and Mrs. Cake) would have eventually forgiven Twilight.
I have to congratulate you, the story was sad, entertaining and in the end heart warming, you have great skill in writing, as for the pairing...well I loved it, I really dont care who is shipped with who as long as they find happines...cus at the end...thats all there is isnt?
I still think Twilight could have hided Pinkie better in the messages to Celestia...well anyhow
nice stoy, gonna keep track of you in case you write another lovely fic
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Thank you very much Nico Ax! That means a lot to me, and you are right, as long as two people who are with each other are happy it doesn't matter!
Twilight could have hid Pinkie WAY better in the story. I had always pictured Twilight as a bad liar, and I tried to get that across in the story. I'm glad that came across!
This is the best fic I've read in a LONG while.
On a scale from 1 to 10, this one goes to 11. Now shut up and take my stars.
Very nice; keep doing what your doing and turning out good works of fanfiction.
<<Obsidian Shadow>> First off, your name is awesome. Secondly I am really happy you liked the story! Thank you for such high praise! Hehe I am reminded of a scene from Aladin where the bird, Iago, is imitating Jafar and he says about the same thing! I am honored by your stars and will sleep with them by my bed at night!!
<<Eriniou>> Thank you very much and I hope to! This was the first story I have written in a long time that I could actually "feel" if that makes any sense.
I'm sorry to put up so many comments on my own story. I wanted to thank everyone again that enjoyed the story. You are all very inspiring, and I hope that I am able to write more work that you enjoy. I have taken a look at some of your works as well and I found them very enjoyalbe (I haven't put up any comments yet but I'll get to it)
I don't know if this is innuendo to do in a comments section, and if it is tell me and I'll take this comment down, but I have a question to any and all interested. I am looking for other writers to get together with to talk about fiction, help with edits, ideas, readings, and just general things like that. I would be happy to readand/or any writers work in exchange for reading mine. If anyone would be interested, send me a message and we can go from there.
Thank you for reading this.
SL
Excuse me, while I wipe the tears off my keyboard.
A very much deserved 5/5.
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Thank you very much for that heartfelt response! I really appreciate that a lot!
Eye-wateringly good. Excellent story.
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Thank you very much BFB, I am glad you liked the story!
a wonderful and heartwarming story.
on the head when she decided to sacrifice her love for the good of the country.
but i wanted to hit twilight
luckily everithing ended well.
5/5 stars and faved.
I'm in awe.
I thought a one-sided romance story would be a bit biased but the letters are very descriptive so I was wrong on that.
I honestly doubted that the general public would be so upset by a fillyfooler as a ruler that they would make her step down... considering the sun goddess has her back but maybe Twilight just jumps to conclusions... 
Tell your friend good luck and remind her what an awesome friend you are 
!!!
MANLY TEARS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
Also I think 'people' should be 'ponies'
"I want people who disapprove to look upon us with disgust. I want to be called a fillyfooler. I want all of their insults and hatred to rain down on me! I want it because when I am next to Pinkie, all of those insults melt away."
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Thank you guys very much for your comments. I had the same feeling when I was writing the story, I was thinking "Twilight you idiot!" But that was kind of the point, Twilight had to realize what she was doing was not what she needed to do to be happy and live.
I am inspired that my story left you in awe Kitsune, that makes me feel great! Thank you.
Thank you Jahalus623. It was kind of hard to make sure that I got the feelings of both characters across through the letters. I don't think the general public would care either, since so many of them are female, and even if they were since the world is founded on friendship, I'd imagine that the ponies could easily look past the sexuality of another. One reason I chose Twilight for a story like this, she jumps to conclusions A LOT in the series, especially in relation to Celestia. I thank you for that sentiment :) I always do what I can to help my friends!
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*Gives you a manly rag to wipe away the manly tears!* As we all know, it takes a real man to shed manly tears!
Urgh! LOL I swear I always do that. I shall fix that right away, thank you for catching that!
I laughed a hearty laugh, I cried a manly tear, and I smiled a very warm smile. My only regret is I have only 5 stars to give. Well done!