Life is precious.
It should never be created casually, but if it is, it should never be taken away.
Pinkie's clones were thoughtlessly created, and then heartlessly destroyed.
But the magic of the Mirror Pool is strange and powerful, and now Pinkie's unnatural offspring have risen like Lazarus from its enchanted waters.
This isn't going to be fun for anypony.
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Interesting... and sad.... so very sad...
I sort of feel like Twilight would have a bit better than that. Anyways, good story, keep it up.
Very good, although I think Twilight is a bit out of character. I shall follow this story closely.
In the 11th paragraph, a typo: 'nuance' instead of 'nuisance'. And Spike's first line: an exclamation point instead of a question mark.
Yes! That last bit. All of my yes!
i feel as if i would expect rarity to yell at the doctor about riding twilight rather then twilight
Time Turner is 904 years old?!? Impressive! Love it! Cant wait for the next chapter!
*strokes imaginary beard
* interesting.....very interesting indeed....
Some small typos
The entrance
They crept up
Wouldn't "to my side" worked better?
use (lightnings?) against the Pinkies.
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Thanks. The first two were typos and I've corrected them. However, I think the command 'by my side,' works just as well as 'to my side', and I don't think it's necessary to specify how the clouds are being used for defense. It could be lightening, but it could also be wind or rain or hail.
The last one suggestion was mostly to make sentence flow better.
I have no problem with fine working Heisenberg compensator's in place of specifics.
ex. "...use them against the Pinkies."
While the topic is not joyous, i have to say i love that you took this episode this way...i thought so myself, they literally were destroying pinkie clones.