Im jonnydash i enjoy fan fics and drawing! im writing my first fan fic so please bear with my writing ability! Applejack is best pony! :D
The Main Character finds a mysterious key, to what you have no idea and just and eerie e-mail telling him that the answer and instructions are "inside you". he enters a world not knowing what to expect how to get home or why hes there.
Thanks to my fantastic editor.
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Great Intro Can't Wait For More
If I found a strange key in my bedroom, received an anonymous email telling me what to do with the key, and discovered that someone had replaced my front door with one that matches the mysterious key perfectly, I'd be freaked the fuck out. I'd think someone was stalking me, or wanted to trap me in my house "Cask of Amontillado" style. Your character is either a ridiculously chill guy, mellow to the point of fault, or isn't freaked-out enough for the crazy stuff that's happening to him. All in all, though, I'd say this is a decent introduction.
Cool start!
I gotta admit that when I read the description and it said "inside you", I had some VERY weird thoughts
I'm tracking, commenting and rating
-Glassed
sorry but i have to. "Watch out for that first step it's a doozy".
Very interesting, can't wait for more.
198266
yay thank you :)
197302
yay!!
197489
thank you!! im trying my best to keep it interesting as this is my first fic.
when you said five other ponies you forgot to mention rarity.
200308
oh crap im fixing it now lol
Hmm... I don't know how to feel about this chapter
I don't know why, but it felt a bit rushed
Though I can't tell you how to make it better, so I'll take it
-Glassed
209250 Haha, don't worry, I AM everywhere
Yeah, I have the occasional stalker
I'm currently reading 100+ fics and I've left my mark on at least x2 of that, so I'm hard to miss
And yeah, I liked this picture more. Fits me better; love reading and I have glasses
-Glassed
Wow...That's kind of, well, disturbingly awesome.
Comedy, Adventure, Slice of life...
I think you're forgetting a tag or two....
219751
im glad you liked it? lol
221243
is that good? idk i just figured id tag it and just run with the story in my head.
Sooo.... where do the "Comedy" and "Slice of Life" tags come into play?
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fixed.
sorry bout that. i just havent updated my tags sine the beginning.
228755 How dare the...Well, she was loyalty afterall
229614 Have faith
the story is far from over
snape kills dumbledore
"I proceeded to walk almost stumble out "
needs tweaked i think..
"I proceeded to walk and almost stumble out "
- OR -
"I proceeded to walk almost stumbling out "
You killed Fluttershy!
Oh, so you put Austin in your story, but not me? Feels bad man...
It feels so weird knowing that this is you in the story
You promised me blood, and it was what I received...I am not disappoint!
Despite a few flaws, (that are more down to a lack of commas in areas) this is a good start!
I will eagerly read more of this.
..STAR WARS