Bonus: Evening
As Spike was walking back towards the library to make the food, he decided now was as good time as any to address the thing he has been ignoring.
"So, the spell Twilight cast on me makes me 'real' huh? I'm guessing that meant that I speak my mind."
Spike chewed on that thought for a moment. He liked it.
"I can deal with that. Might make for an interesting picnic though." Spike shrugged as he proceeded along. He saw the library coming into view and picked up the pace. Since he didn't see Trixie waiting he shrugged. "Her loss."
"Hey Spike!" Spike turned to see Rainbow Dash flying over with a glare on her face.
Spike blinked. "Uh, hey Dash. Why are you glaring at me?"
"Don't 'hey' me! Why did you say all those things about Angel?" Dash said with irritation.
Spike frowned. "Dash, don't play dumb. I know you know, that bunny is a demonic furball."
"So? You didn't have to tell her that! Now there's gonna be a whole ordeal about it!"
Spike raised a brow. "I'm sure they will take care of everything in private."
"But she asked me to be there too! That bunny's gonna come after me!" Rainbow complained.
"Oh blah, blah your needs. They need this talk. She might knock some sense into that bunny." Spike said as he turned from her.
Rainbow wasn't having it. "Oh, no you don't! If I'm suffering through this, then so are you!" Rainbow spread her wings and grabbed Spike with her forehooves.
Spike's eyes grew wide as he felt himself be tossed into the sky. "What the? Hey!" Spike landed on her back and before he could move, she took flight, gaining altitude.
Spike, seeing that there was no way of getting off unless by a fifty foot or more drop, clung to her neck tightly and spoke up. "What the hay Dash! I have things to do right now."
"You can do them later. Right now, we have a date with our friend and a crazy bunny."
Spike faceclawed. "Maybe this isn't as great as I thought."
Rainbow Dash spread her wings wide as she landed right in front of Fluttershy's house door. She looked back at Spike and spoke up with a smirk.
"Like that little flying session didn't ya?"
Spike loosened his grip as he hopped off her to the ground. "No. That was terrifying. Remind me to never do that again. Did you even remember I was back there?"
Rainbow hesitated before looking away. "O-Of course!"
Spike glared at her. "Well that's just great. I lived through the possibility of falling off to my doom, seeing that my friend forgot I was even there."
"Well you didn't!" Rainbow retorted.
Spike shrugged. "I said that." He then turned and knocked on Fluttershy's door, getting a raised brow from his companion. "Might as well get it over with," He said simply.
The door creaked open and Fluttershy peeked out the door before noticing Rainbow. "Oh! You're here." She opened the door more and notices Spike as well. "Spike? W-What are you doing here?" She said nervously.
"I was swept off my feet by this pegasus and taken here before I had a chance to do anything about it." Spike said simply, earning a glare from Rainbow. He thought of something and continued. "But, it would probably be best if I did come; seeing as I am the one that told you."
Fluttershy calmed after he said that. "Oh, well please do come in. I'm actually glad you came."
"And why is that?" Spike said as he entered. However, as soon as he did, he was greeted to a carrot straight to the forehead. "Ow!" Spike looked at the carrot and immediately knew who threw it. "Alright where is he? I swear if he wasn't your friend Fluttershy, I'd-"
He didn't get to finish as he got hit in the forehead with a rock this time. "Aah! That's it! He's going down!" Spike said as he scanned and saw him standing by the kitchen doorway. He was tossing a rock in his paw and had an irritated look. As Spike was about to walk forward, Angel cocked back the rock, ready to throw.
"Stop it right now!" Fluttershy dashed in between the two and took the rock from Angel. "Angel, you don't throw things at others. That's mean and could really hurt others. Now apologize to Spike."
Angel crossed his arms and shook his head. Fluttershy glared at him and he hesitated.
"Don't make me use it Angel." Fluttershy warned.
Angel groaned before hopping past Fluttershy and over to Spike. He stood in front of him and reluctantly extended a paw.
Spike looked at him for a moment. He smirked and extended his claw to shake. "That must be really something to make you listen to her like you do. I'm glad she never used it on me."
Angel shook his head and had an expression saying 'no, you really don't'. He then turned around and hopped over towards Fluttershy.
"Now Angel, is it true that you treat others badly when I'm not around?" Fluttershy asked when he got close.
Angel hesitated and looked away and Fluttershy caught it. "You know you shouldn't be doing bad things Angel. They will only get others to dislike you and what if, maybe, they do bad things back?"
"Yeah, like maybe messing with a fire breathing dragon for fun isn't the best idea." Spike added. Rainbow snickered slightly while Angel turned and glared at him.
"He's right Angel. Spike may be nice but others could hurt you. I don't want anything to happen to you so please don't do anything that will."
Angel frowned and looked down, and he nodded. Fluttershy leaned down and nuzzled him gently. "Thank you. Now I have for you a little something for being such a helpful bunny lately." Fluttershy turned and went to the kitchen, grabbing the bag of sweets Spike remembered she got from Sugarcube Corner earlier. She opened the bag and pulls out one of them. "Here you go; A carrot cupcake."
Angel happily takes the treat and chows down on it. Meanwhile Spike spoke to Rainbow.
"Well, that was solved quickly. Didn't seem like we really needed to be here. And you thought It would turn out bad."
"Yeah, that was pretty painless." Rainbow sighed after she said that.
Spike raised a brow. "You were really worried huh? That's a surprise." Rainbow glared at him but Spike spoke up before she could. "Not saying you aren't caring, but that you would be over something not really that big."
Rainbow relaxed at that. She looked over at Fluttershy nuzzling Angel while he ate a cupcake and shrugs. "It's just Fluttershy, I guess."
Spike looked over as well. He nods. "I agree. Well, now that everything is good, I'll be on my way. I still have things to do after all." Spike said as he turned and started for the door. "See you at the picnic Fluttershy! Later Rainbow." Fluttershy merely waved at him, while Rainbow walked after him.
"Hey, let me fly you back. It's the least I could do." Rainbow offered as she followed him out.
Spike looked at her. "Are you gonna forget I'm back there this time?"
Rainbow frowned. "I'm sorry! Geez. I won't forget again."
Spike smiled. "Good enough." He hopped on her back and held on tight. "Now, lets see what the best flyer in Ponyville is capable of."
Rainbow smirked. "Oh yeah! Hold on tight! You're in for a ride." Rainbow said as she spread her wings and bolted off high into the sky, this time making sure Spike was still holding on.
Rainbow dived down and did one final loop before landing stylishly on the ground nearby the castle. Spike saw the ground and hopped off. He turned to her and smiled.
"Now that was awesome. Much better when I'm a known passenger. You have skills Dash."
Rainbow rubbed a hoof to her chest. "You're just realizing that?"
"Nah, just acknowledging it now." Spike said with a smirk.
Rainbow glared at him. "Whatever!" She then took flight, about to head out.
Spike spoke up before she left. "Thanks for the ride Dash. I'll see you at the picnic!" He waved at her.
She looked at him and smirked slightly. "Yeah, see ya." She turned and flew off past a building and out of sight.
Spike turned and started toward the castle, however, he didn't make it two steps before hearing his name.
"Hey Spike!"
Spike frowned as he turned and saw two colts rushing over. However, they weren't with their previous companion. "What is it guys? I'm kinda busy right now."
"We lost Trixie and can't find her!" Snips said in slight panic.
"Yeah! And we was wondering if you knew where she was since you two were together earlier." Snails added.
Spike crossed his arms. "Have you ever considered that she might not be lost, but ditched you guys? She had something to take care of so it wouldn't surprise me."
"But why would she ditch us? We could have came with!" Snips complained.
Spike faceclawed again. "I'm doing this alot today..." Spike mumbled before he looked at them. "You guys messed up her career by bringing a Ursa Minor into Ponyville. That was completely stupid. No sugarcoating that at all. That was stupid."
The two colts visibly flinched at the insult. "Geez, you don't have to say it like that..." Snips said dejectedly.
Spike sighed. "Listen guys. I know you two can be smarter than you let on; Heck you both got your cutie marks before anypony else in your class from what Apple Bloom told me. So, why in Equestria would you bring one of those into town?"
Snips hesitated. "W-We just wanted to see Trixie vanquish one."
"Yeah, and to get on her good side. She's really cute." Snails said with a goofy smile.
Spike chuckled. "You two are simple-minded, not dumb. But seriously, you have to think before you do crazy things like that."
"Oh don't worry. We learned our lesson last time. We just want to prove that to Trixie too." Snips said.
Spike shrugged. "Well, stop by the castle tomorrow. I'm sure she will be here and if you don't do anything crazy, I think she might give you two another chance."
The two colts smiled wide at this. "Okay! See ya Spike!" They both said simultaneously as they both turned and walked away.
"Ya think she might give us a chance?" Snails asked Snips.
"I know she will. Even Spike thought so. He's smart." Snips replied as they got farther away, soon disappearing into town the same way Rainbow went earlier.
Spike smiled and turned to the castle. "Those two aren't so bad. I should hang out with them more often."
As Spike got to the door and opened it, he thought of something.
I wonder when this spell will wear off...
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Huh, that was a nice way of explaining why RD was glaring at him so much and why Snail and Snip wasn't with Trixie. Either way this is still a great story.
5256744
Aww but its supposed to be short and sweet.
5261749
Thank you! Just a little gift since the story became more popular than I ever thought it would be.
Oh, I'm really glad to see a bonus chapter pop up, I really liked the story :D. Spike really has it rough in show, always being the comic relief and occasional punching bag. To see him win a little is a pleasure
5261839
It really is. That's why I love to make these stories.
Why do I feel Spike was more of a dick than of 'real' when first conversing with RD?
Well... my loss. Nice bonus though
Okay, I'm sorry to have to say this, but I had to stop about half way through this chapter - your tenses are all over the place between past and present. Once or twice I could cope with, but it was nearly every other sentence. Just at random:
You have "offered" (past tense) and "follows" (present tense) in the same sentence. That's... REALLY jarring. I found it unreadable so, I'm afraid. (It should either be "Rainbow offers as she follows him out" (present tense ) or "Rainbow offered as she followed him out" (past tense).)
Now, as that was not a problem in the rest of the story, I am guessing that you were maybe trying to do this one in the present tense for some reason...? (If so, you ought to go back through and replace all the "[verb]ed" with "[verb]s" or vice versa if you weren't). It doesn't matter whether you have past or present tense, so long as you pick one and stick with it consistently (thoughout the story/chapter/point-of-view section).
Thanks for the bonus chapter. It was a nice touch to what happened between the four of them.
5261931
Wait, do you mean he was more rude after the spell?
5261948
Oh crud, I did it again. Sorry, some stories I try to do present and others I do past. Got them mixed up. Ill fix it now though.
Don't forget about the CMC solving Spike's change.
5261948
I just finished editing it. Hopefully the tenses aren't messed up like before anymore.
5262006
But... that won't make it a short story anymore
5262352
Nope. They will never know.
This was quite the enjoyable read, thank you
That was neat.
5262439
You are very welcome.
5262484
Thanks.
5262529 It was cool how Spike made it real with Rarity, and the rest of the six. Well written good pace. Fun.
Aura Zero, make a sequel of sorts that has the spell cast on Celestia, Luna, Cadance, & Discord.
/evil laughter
5262375
Much better, thank you! (Though there are still a few left towards the end of the chapter.)
That was a fun little bonus chapter. I think we all know just how long Angel's "reformation" will last though, he is truly a wascally wabbit.
5262595
Great to hear!
5262689
.... I don't think Equestria is ready for that.
5262786
Then they all must be fixed!
5262786
I think I got them all.
5262966
In my opinion he'd probably change enough to make Fluttershy happy, but might still mess with others like Rainbow Dash and Spike.
5263141 So he gets better at hiding his shenanigans? Yeah, I can see that.
5263111 Equestria has the Rainbow of Skittles, they're ready for anything.
5262382 short stories are boring, though a sequel would be nice... Maybe title it 'Spike's 'real' week'?
5264221
Haha seven days eh?
5263520
Not really any shipping here. Hints maybe, but no shipping. Also if you would like to know the reasoning why those situations happened like they did, feel free to ask and I'll be happy to explain it to you in a message.
Thanks fo da chptah... Wait do you skyrim on pc? If so would an orc archer/rogue work with Skyre?
5264453 if I didn't know any better I'd say I'm setting up a Five Nights at Freddy's story for Spike.
This is cute.
I like how the spell didn't really change Spike, it just amplified what was already there. He's been a snarker since day one.
5272784
And thanks for reading. Glad you liked it.
Great, you noticed!
5262314
Neigh, in bonus chapter only. That could be due to my misperception of speech patterns or simply speaking due to being a senseless monster. Or that could be because I'm not native english speaker. Not shure which one
5273517
Well he does seem more rude at the start... but it was more snarky comments, something Spike is quite known for.
Well, since you took the time to ask me what I think of the story,
This makes me wish Spike had more balls in the series itself. He's a real bro when he gets like that.
Next to that, your writing style itself is enjoyable to read, and I couldn't find any mistakes myself.
And your characterization is pretty well-done, too.
That's what I call worthy of a fave.
5288651
Thanks! I'm glad the story was good in the aspects i hoped it was. Hope you stop in on the next little story i put up.
5324702
yup. He needed that little help so he could realize that the truth is necessary sometimes....
As for Trixie, she might be seeing Spike more often because of those cookies...
5385943
The rejection is strong with this one.
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5528481 I don't know, anyone would get sick of bird song eventually.
5529040
the same thing could apply with someone speaking their name repeatedly in a sentence...or being called a childish pet name by your crush.
6279420
It was worth a reread? Awesome! And thanks for the mistake. I'll fix it now.
6346597
I think you are missing the reasoning behind him acting the way he is...
Once again, well done. Not much else to say that hasn't already been said.
6346628
Thanks alot. I tried my best with this story(a little more than the others) and I'm glad it was so well received. Hope this won't be the last story you read and will look forward to more.
Now this is a Spike that Hasbro should have created. Not this comedic butt monkey, villain wannabe! I wish this is what we saw in the show and I now hate the story for showing me what a well defined character is like. I liked this story, I am just now saddened...
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