Help Improve Writing

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- Help Improving Writing -

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Hey guys. I wrote this story a few years ago, and you guys tracked it. I'm wanting to know what I did right and wrong with this story so that I can improve as a writer. Any tips and tricks would be highly appreciated. MrNumbers has helped point me in the right direction, but some more input would be very helpful.

Thanks!

~ Socks

PS: Skeeter has great taste in OCs.

Comments

[Slowpoke]

You see, your first mistake was asking MrNumbers for writing advice.

[insertfootinmouth]

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[Forgoten Null]

It's hard to give any critisim at all, the story was very well written and to the point. Maybe if you gave people an idea as to what you were concerned about or specifically what you wanted to improve on then they would be able to give you some decent criticism, but as it stands I don't see you getting much out of this exercise.

Hell, even then, it's probably going to be pretty difficult because 2k words is not a very large amount of material to work with.