Digital Grove is a young father, all he wants to do is make his young six year old daughter happy and to do whats best for her. Digital moves to Ponyville with his daughter so he can move forward and continue to run away and forget his past mistakes he has made, while giving his daughter better chances in life.
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... on second thought, I'm not going to give you a blow by blow on errors, because I'll miss too much. There's a lot of obvious capitation issues, like I told you last time, and some tense issues. Also, you need to add commas in some sentences. Get an editor to help more.
I think it's a sound idea, and I enjoy it. Keep at it, because I'd like to see how your writing changes as your skills grow. And sorry for not commenting earlier, I was busy. hehehehe yeah. guess it's not an excuse.
4280810 it's alright man we all have plans
Pretty good, dude. There was a lot of problems with punctuation and capitalization, so I'd advise a readthrough to fix it up a bit. Also, you spend a good deal of time having Dig telling others "he doesn't want to talk about it." This is just a bit unrealistic. You reveal a lot of stuff through the dialogue, but that's not exactly a good thing in this case. You lay everything flat out instead of implying and hinting. Take the scene Rarity and Dig talks about Sugar's mom. If you right it were some of the information was implied, it would look more like this:
How you do it is up to you, but while writing, keep in mind a character can say a lot more with their body and actions rather than their words, and those actions will have a far deeper meaning than any words.
4809282 I think I need you as my proof reader XD.