Life is a game, you just need to know how to play it. I learned it the hard way, even if not in the World I was actually born in.
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Keep going, i'm loving this story.
7627238 Thanks!
Nice chapter, can't wait for the next one.
7627288 Soon...
so will this have elements of the my little pony comic series? that had some interesting stuff I'm sure it be a curve ball for her with only show knowledge but a lot of effort on her part for any comic related shenanigans would be fun to read her doing stuff on the fly with no foreknowledge to go on unless she can gain a skill to look at it
here a site that offers a free reading of the comic series if you're interested
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http://readcomiconline.to/Comic/My-Little-Pony-Friendship-is-Magic
I have many stories and I find this vrry addicting for some reason can't wait fot more.
Man, I love the idea of a suicide having happened. It's so god damn dark, but it really makes the whole situation seem that much more awkward. Something tells me that if the truth came out it would really crush some of the others. Reading about some of the other friends abilities really makes me really wonder how Equestria is at peace. I mean Minutte alone could basically crush most villains. Just DIO time, slash Tirek's neck, and problem solved. Anyway, great chapter, keep goin and stay golden^^
I take it she can use the Alicorn Amulet without going off the deep end thanks to Gamer's Mind?
And always wondered if the Amulet acts only as a power source or if it also had a build in Spell Archive...
7627325 1) There will be some thing from Comics, but it will be some time before they will appear.
2) I actually used this Site to read the Mini-Series.
7627424 Good to hear!
7627746 Hehehe...
7627950 1) I'll work some things out down the line.
2) Because they had no reason to weaponize these Abilities, there literally little to no conflicts that require things that our imagination can come up with on the spot due to our World be far more violent.
7628152 1) Yes, but I'm going to use it for another purpose.
2) Nah, just a Power-Booster.
7628178 ... Are you suggesting for the MC to teach her how to Cook, or for the MC to actually Cook her and perform an act of technical cannibalism?
If I was her the moment I got ID create I go to the castle of the Two Sisters and loot the place to the rafters
To be more accurate according to the rep levels you gave to them Twilight doesn't even count as a friend more like someone who sits next to Moondancer in class and knows the name of but that's it.
keep it up it's good so far.
7628790 She trying to be proactive but cautious, so there really was no hurry for her to actually run there.
7629071 A little bit of explanation then: Reputation shows how others view her and in the beginning Twilight viewed only books with Reputation higher than that(With the exception of her Family, Cadance and Celestia).
7629188 Thanks!
Despite the typos and grammar, it's a good chapter, we got to know more of this crazy world of human-ponies moondancer.
Still the pacing is very slow for 10k words, granted The Gamer comics are full of exposition and internal dialogue, just like this fic, The Gamer is a comic while this is a literary work, which makes exposition easier to bear.
Just realized something, her gamer ability observe can circumvent changeling disguises? can't wait for the inevitable time when twilight meets her again, if unicorns have any sense-mana ability she would very likely notice her friend power-boost.
7631625 1. I'm trying to work on World-Building while not disrespecting Canon Material. About Typos? I'm working on them.
2. Please note that in the Summary I added the description about how my writing works and how it is connected to the Timeline of the Canon.
3.1 Yes, Changelings won't be able to hide from her.
3.2 Twilight have the same problem Ichigo has in Bleach, she just has so much Mana that it leaks out and dumpers her senses and if Jessica won't flare it Twilight won't notice.
7631194 bu bu but looting
7632321 Oh, didn't you see the Chapter? She will be doing it soon!
Also, there will be a shocking twist coming, I hope you'll like how things will be developing there.
7632329 yay
7632329 gamer fics are some of my most favorite amongst the fanfiction. I know I'm not good at writing fanfiction I can come up with ideas that are really good but I'm not good at writing them myself I know how the story should go for the fanfiction ideas but I can never write it right I'm still working on the first chapter of my displaced story after months of being stuck
7633113 1. Well, I'm just following the Canon where she's absurdly big Pony.
2. I can't find a proper body-simulator so I make the measurements via my own imagination.
7633721 Did you see how tall she is in the Show? Do the math.
7633795 Don't worry, we all started like that.
ETA for next chapter?
7635317 Today or tomorrow.
7636024 :D
Going to try and give a constructive review here
First the Good bits of this story.
I admit when i first picked up this to read i was weary of reading it as to many of the Gamer crossovers always end up being nothing but stat page after stat page with very little actual story. Thus when i saw the number of words for these two chapters you would forgive me if i though its actual length was only going to be half of the word count. I was happily suprised to be proven wrong with each chapter containing little stuffing and being full of an interesting and engaging story with a believable cast and story flow, with the main character acting appropriatly for the circumstances and not just having everything go their way. I particularly like the fact that no the SI did not suddenly win at everything without trying and was sensible enough to not try something like robbing the royal vaults immediatly even with the gamer powers.
Another great part of this story is its originality in that the SI is not one of the main six, and is in fact one of the nearly forgotten side characters that has a real contection to the world with good reasons for her actions.
and now the parts that could do with a little polishing.
with this the main issue is the spelling and grammar of the story, there are parts where words are either misspelt, misplaced or outright missing. a particular point which made me chuckle regardless was when the SI was giving herself a confidence boost about what to do with her life onwards and meant to say she was not a quiter she infact stated she was one. so all I can advise on this front is to get a prereader or correct it as mistakes are pointed out to you.
Apart from that i found very little wrong with your story and am waiting for the next one,
7636024 Awesome. Eagerly awaiting it.
7633834 thanks for the encouragement
7636024 if I give you a story idea would you try and Wright it out
ok depending on how grind crazy she goes I have a idea that should help her magic, strength, speed, vitality, and possibly luck. what she needs to do is get the heaviest possible things she can find and attach the to her body. After that she needs to take a deep breath and jump into a deep body of water and activate telekinesis to separate the Oxygen from the hydrogen so she can breath underwater. Then start working out. the water resistance and pressure will put strain on her body and make strength training harder.
7636113
7636206 1. Thank you!
2.1 I always try to be more refined than simply buffing up my word-count with that crap, I learned my lesson a long time ago.
2.2 She has brains, and she knows that right now she's at the bottom of the food-chain and have to actually work her ass off to get at least a moderate progress done.
3. I actually decided it to be Moon Dancer after I watched S5E12-"Amending Fences" and honestly wanted to punch Twilight into the face for she self-rightfulness that really reminded me of the eldritch abomination that wears orange and has blond hair. The only time she was even worse than that was in that Comics about Chilly and Bulls when she refused to use Magic to stop the bulls and actually repaired the documents that if destroyed would've saved the whole town because they were verified by notaries!
4. I'm working on my grammar, and I'm getting better.
5. Soon!
7638423 Soon!
7638528 No problem!
7638664 Send it to me by PM, I'll see what I can do.
7638900 You do understand that she will need to actually be able to perform her [Telekinesis] on the atomic level to do so and how fucking much she will need to grind that particular Skill to do so? It will take years!
7638972 how do I p.m. oh wait figured it out
7638972 how about a water breathing spell or a bubble head charm like in Harry Potter that should work
7639126 I'll look it over.
7639175 I'll think about it, but it honestly reminds me too much about 'Kung-Fu Football'.
7639203 I honestly have no idea what kung fu football is
7639227 This.
7638972 or some serious munchkinery.
7639337
Is it strange that I have this exact same, goddammed problem in real life?
You forgot the 'not' between 'I'm' and 'going'.
1put one of them in a gage
2feed it
3wait
4it reproduces
5kill one of them
6repeat
profit
also...
https://m.Don't you mean
? ;]
Even if that's the correct order, I'd still go for "Lemon Hearts, LV4", because it otherwise implies that she's a level-4 Lemon Hearts... whatever that means. ;]
Well, it took me two re-reads of the sentence to get it, but the mood of the overall story took a nosedive right then. Ouch... That'd be pretty drastic, and if it ever came to light... I wouldn't even know how to begin consoling her friends...