For the last hour or so I've been playing with the young ponies some more.
Suddenly, I hear some commotion in the hall.
"Looks like they're back," Cheerilee says softly.
"In that case," I reply, "I've got to go."
"Awwwwwww," sighs all the fillies and colts.
"Don't worry guys," I say, "I'll be sure to come back and play some other time, okay?"
I head toward the door. Applebloom and Sweetiebelle follow, since they found out who I was they have never left my side.
"Applebloom! Sweetiebelle!" calls Cheerilee, "Where do you two think you're going?"
"We want to see if they won," explains Sweetiebelle.
"Ya, an' see who they rescued!" adds Applebloom.
"You're supposed to stay here," replies Cheerilee, "And I don't think Bluebell here wants you two to follow her around all the time."
"I don't really mind actually," I put in, "But if they're supposed to stay here, then they should stay."
The two Cutie Mark Crusaders look at the ground, obviously disappointed.
"Oh, well," says Cheerilee, "If you don't mind watching them then I guess they can go with you."
They look at me with pleading eyes. It would be impossible to say no, "Sure, you guys can come."
"YAY!" they shout.
"Can we come too?" asks one of the other fillies.
"Oh...uh..." I stammer. I don't think i should take all of them.
"No my little ponies," cuts in Cheerilee, "We can't have all of you running around out there. Wait until dinnertime and I'm sure that the Commander will tell us everything."
The fillies and colts nod their heads and resume chatting and playing amongst themselves.
I give a silent thank you to Cheerilee, and walk into the hallway, Applebloom and Sweetiebelle in tow.
Sure enough, ponies are in the hall, adorned in battle armor. Some of them are bloodied, and the initial smell almost makes my lunch win a one way trip to the floor. I look at the two fillies, they look disgusted too.
"Stay near me you two," I whisper to them, and they nod and move in closer. I look around and then I see a familiar face.
"Lyra! Hey!" I call out.
"Bluebell! What's up!" Lyra responds, walking up to me, "Oh man you should of been there! We totally kicked Changeling and Shadow Pony butt!"
"Shadow Ponies?" I ask.
"You know, those grey unicorn things with the black and reddish manes," Lyra explains, "We don't know what they are really called, but we just call them Shadow Ponies."
"Oh yeah," I say, remembering my first encounter with one. How I had snapped it's neck, and the feeling of it's blood on my hoof...I try to clear that memory out of my head.
"Oh hey who are those two?" asks Lyra, who points at Applebloom and Sweetiebelle.
'Oh, this is Applebloom and Sweetiebelle," I answer, "I, uh, just met them when I was helping out Cheerilee. They seem to have gotten...attached to me or something. They insist on following me. I-I don't mind at all though."
"Ok," replies Lyra, "Hello Applebloom and Sweetiebelle! The name's Lyra. Lyra Heartstrings."
"Hi!" says Sweetiebelle.
"Hello there Lyra!" puts in Applebloom.
"Hey did you guys rescue anypony?" asks Sweetiebelle.
"Who did ya rescue?" adds in Applebloom before Lyra has a chance to answer.
"Are they hurt?"
"Are they alright?"
"How many ponies did you rescue?"
"Did y'all see our sisters?"
"Calm down!" Lyra cries out, unable to keep up, "Look, i didn't exactly get to see the rescued. I'm not part of the rescue team. From what i heard, just about all of them are alright. Nothing major. But I heard that there was one pony that was all screwed up. Major injuries, I think. Also heard that she can't remember anything. That poor pony...wish we could of saved her sooner...But anyway, i have to go get cleaned up. The rescued are in the infirmary. You can go visit and see if you can find anypony you know. See you guys later."
"Bye," I say quietly, thinking of the pony who Lyra mentioned.
"That pony she talked about, wonder who it is..." Sweetiebelle says sadly.
"Guess we're gonna find out," replies Applebloom.
We head to the infirmary. We enter, and there are eight beds lined against the wall with a small crowd of ponies surrounding them. I take a peek at each one as we walk past. I don't really recognize any of them. Until we reach the last one...
Nurse Redheart was speaking to the Commander, who is sitting next to the eighth bed. Liquid is steadily flowing out of the front of her cloak. I realize that they're tears. The Commander is crying, no, sobbing.
"I'm sorry, there is nothing we can do," I hear Nurse Redheart say as we get nearer, "Her injuries should heal with time, but her memory, I don't think that that will ever get fixed."
The Commander nods, "I-I-I u-und-unders-s-tan-and."
"What's wrong?" I ask quietly, and they jump, just realizing we were here.
"She-she," begins the Commander, but continues to cry, unable to speak.
"Who is it?" asks Sweetiebelle. The Commander just then notices the two fillies by my side.
The only answer she gives is harder sobbing.
"C-can we see her?" asks Applebloom.
Nurse Redheart realizing that she's in the way, replies, "Oh, sorry. Of course."
She moves, and we get a full view of the pony in the bed.
"NO!" Applelebloom cries.
"This-this isn't p-possible..." whispers Sweetiebelle.
I just stand there, shocked at the sight of the pony. Most of her legs are in casts. Scars and cuts cover her body. One of her ears is torn off, her mane just about nonexistent. Wings now nothing but a few small feathers. This isn't happening. This can't happening. No way. This can't be real. Not her.
Not Scootaloo...
I don't understand why people would think negatively about your story. I rather enjoy it, though I guess everyone is entitled to their own opinion.
4817348 I think most people didn't like my first couple chapters. And I kinda have to agree. I find starting out a fanfic isn't that easy, and I don't think i did it the best... The dialogue wasn't that great, and you kinda have to read the first few chapters to get a complete understanding on what is happening. The very first negative review on the story was back when only the first chapter was published, and nothing really got explained until chapter 2, so it was kinda confusing back then. I could try to fix the first chapters, but writing new chapters takes long enough as it is and with school coming up I will have barely any time to write.
I kinda dragged this reply out too long didn't I? I tend to do that.
Anyway glad you like the story! Being rather new to writing fanfics, every positive comment just makes my day!
And yes, everyone is entitled to their own opinion. i don't expect everyone to like my stories. I just wish that they would explain why instead of just giving a dislike.
4817415 Isn't that to be expected though? Every story starts out somewhere, and the first few would generate be confusing as the characters and plot are just being introduced. Yea, new chapters can be a pain at first. Nah, only a little bit.
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Yeah but you have to admit if you read the first chapter of this fanfic and nothing else you'd be pretty confused. Literally nothings explained until the second chapter.
4817450 I could say the same for my first fic. Though, I explained even less. I never gave a why for the things that happened. I planned on adding those in a much later chapter.
... Yep. Definitely Rainbow. Who else would sob that uncontrollably over Scoots. Anyways, beautiful, as always. Can't wait for the next chapter.