People said that always look up when everything is going down, they said that always lift up your gaze for search a light of hope, even if that light is gone forever. Now I search that no-existent light for give hope to those that dropped their gaze
Just wanted to ask something : isn't it a bit hard from Celestia to seal James into stone like that ? i mean she and Luna , did the same for Discord because there was no other way to deal with him , same for Tirek , he was locked away in Tartarus because of what he did , and what he wanted to do now James just arrived and decided to help Equestria to get some new technologies but it ended spreading the black death , and leaving Equestria in a terrible shape is he really responsible for this ? he never forced the princesses to agree , he just shared what he knew he couldn't predict what would happen , but the princesses seemed at thos moment to be already in bad situation so , did she sealed James just because of an over- reaction ? i'm not saying that it's bad or anything , i just wanted to know your thoughts about it.
after all there will be more chapters so may be we'll get more informations about this situation later.
So the story is an alternative universe in which equestria and it's neighbours have everything like in Dishonored... Interesting but could be good ^.^ I will continue to read
You need to go back and edit this. There are a lot of grammatical errors and you need to pick a tense and stick with it. Either go full past tense or go present but do not mix the two constantly to the point that it sounds off and wrong to my ears when I read even a portion out loud. You also have tense contradictions even within some sentences. It seems like a good idea but does not read well currently and is turning me off from continuing.
Just wanted to ask something : isn't it a bit hard from Celestia to seal James into stone like that ?
i mean she and Luna , did the same for Discord because there was no other way to deal with him ,
same for Tirek , he was locked away in Tartarus because of what he did , and what he wanted to do
now James just arrived and decided to help Equestria to get some new technologies but it ended spreading the black death , and leaving Equestria in a terrible shape
is he really responsible for this ? he never forced the princesses to agree , he just shared what he knew he couldn't predict what would happen ,
but the princesses seemed at thos moment to be already in bad situation so , did she sealed James just because of an over- reaction ?
i'm not saying that it's bad or anything , i just wanted to know your thoughts about it.
after all there will be more chapters so may be we'll get more informations about this situation later.![:eeyup:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/eeyup.png)
Other than a few minor spelling errors, I don't see why this story is getting so many downvotes.
So the story is an alternative universe in which equestria and it's neighbours have everything like in Dishonored... Interesting but could be good ^.^ I will continue to read
You need to go back and edit this. There are a lot of grammatical errors and you need to pick a tense and stick with it. Either go full past tense or go present but do not mix the two constantly to the point that it sounds off and wrong to my ears when I read even a portion out loud. You also have tense contradictions even within some sentences. It seems like a good idea but does not read well currently and is turning me off from continuing.
Wait...first noble?
Did Blueballs die before the story even started? Dang.