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Playing there games

A human victim treated like trash.

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slasherbro64

slasherbro64 #1 · Nov 14th, 2015 · · ·

make a 2nd story to this I hate cliff hangers

ComatoseVEVO

ComatoseVEVO #2 · Nov 14th, 2015 · · ·

First off polish this, get some more chapters in, the redaction could use some work, though the orthography is kinda bad, and who is Kaiden?
Also names go with capitals, this story has no gore no dark themes and an unbelievably OOC Luna and Celestia isn't even heard during the story, continue if you will, I hope you improve
I'll with hold from rating this for now, and I'll add it to my read later list, also whip up a better description.