Asriel was sitting at the flowers, where Chara was buried under, waiting to become that wretched flower again. Before he could become that flower again he was stabbed an unknown assailant who said that he won't die and he'll be transported someplace else that could help him. After waking up in a small clearing in a sinister looking forest he finds a way into a small town inhabited by ponies that are like humans but different. He befriends three little fillies who decided to help him the best they can. They eventually take him to the Mane 6 to see what they can do to help him get home. Asriel will learn the magic of friendship and be able to go back home. Little do they all know is that Asriel will be able to reset the entire timeline with this type of magic.
Undertale and My Little Pony crossover. Enjoy!
Info on sequel here: http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/695488/lets-talk-about-my-undertale-sequel
Ehh i don't think these fandoms mesh very well in the writing world (trust me i tried) also everything seems so out of character as well
6884834 I try my best. I won't give up either.
you could do with some editing, but I like the story
It's good, but you're missing out some words. Adding a few commas here and there would also be good.
Finally, I should've known. it was aster the whole time. Woona dam it.
6885033 It's your detail and description of the world, the show-and-not-tell, that's lacking, as well as lowering your potential word count. But stay Determined! I know you can do it.
"uh, howdy." all hell breaks loose
And if we can get a reference to the Nightmare force then Chara's existence here will be justified. (Considering that she is the only true villian in the Underground...)
Oh shist, he's here! Keep up the good work, neverless!
I dont know, I expect more yelly type of feelings.
If the personalities are hard to do, start with their sterotypes and slowly correct it.
Also, frisk you Flowey, frisk you.
LET THE CONFUSION REIGN! (xD poor Twi.)
STAY D E T E R M I N E D and continue this story, please.
6885033 good let the ideas flow through you lol
You welcome! Glad I can help! Keep up the amazhang work!!
Stay D E T E R M I N E D and please continue this story.
6885033 more
Pls pls PLS tell me it's gonna be like this, PLSSSSSSSSS
6995126 Be a bit more specific on what more of that you like.
6995137
Much many Flowey deaths.......
Any fight scene works for me!
Are the CMC okay?
STAY D E T E R M I N E D and write the sequeal! Eeeeeeeeee
6995674 Their fine.
Good stuff m8.
Well, I hate that it's over, but the knowledge of a sequel fills me with DETERMINATION.
STAY D E T E R M I N E D and please make a sequel.
I have one question
Are we gonna see more gaster in the next story?
7026990 I might include him more. Only time will tell.
It was a good story but had way to many grammer errors.
7123100 I do need to work on my grammar. I should see if I could get an editor.
6885033 Stay determined.
So... Chara is good now?
6884834 I actually kind like it.
Oh boy.
The grammar...
*shivers*
The Show Must Go On the show Will Go On never fear the show Will Go On
CHARA IS NOT A BAD WOLF
7149216 chara was always good
7344224 I understand that now.
WAIT was That CHARA that STABBED ASREIL?!?!
7343933 i know the refrence it came from here and guess what i was listening to it as i read that
6914111 *everything explodes*
7425192 I know. My grammar needs work, I need an editor, and it's the second story I've ever made.
This story has great potential, but it feels kind of fast paced, and the narration kind of feels more like a list of events than a full-fledged story.
7378683 Wouldn't the kid(pun intended) have recognized them?
Geez, totally forgot about our old buddy Gaster.
images.memes.com/meme/833169
7569620
wanna have a bad time, buddy?
This looks like a great story, but there are some sentence structure problems, and some things could be worded better. Do you want an editor? I'd be happy to help if you want.
7610304 I'll think about it.
This story escalated rather quickly but it was amazing either way
YAY GASTER!
7457028 you, my good sir- you know what, we will just get Chara to pay
i just thought at the word 'nauseous' "why not just puke on Chara?"