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TooShyShy


Fan fiction. The final frontier.

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"Is it normal for a mare to like other mares?"

Fluttershy has never been brave enough to search for the answer to that question. Ever since she was a filly, she has felt as if there was something wrong with her for even having such a question in her mind. She doesn't understand her own heart, her own body and its seemingly wrong desire for the romantic company of other mares. She doesn't understand what, if anything, is wrong with her.
But after all of her life-threatening adventures, after all of the ways her character had been built up, torn down, and changed, Fluttershy feels she is finally ready to ask that question and hear the answer.

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This was a very sweet story that got Fluttershy's personality down perfectly. And it really played to the kind of insecurities anyone in her situation would have. I'm guessing Fluttershy's fiancé is left to the imagination then, or was that detail something I missed?

6976919 First of all, thanks for the compliment.

Second of all, I tried to hint at who the fiance was, instead of outright saying it. Most of the clues are in the letter Fluttershy sent to her mother.

6976936 Ah, I think I figured it out.

That was amazing. This really show how tough it can be to get such a big secret like that.

I loved how u added that letter at the end.

6976956 I prefer Appleshy Rolls off the tongue better.

6977519 Butterapplejackshy!

This was an amazing read. I read it last night and ended up thinking about it quite a bit today, just because it was genuinely that good. I finally decided that I just had to leave a comment here. I loved almost every detail about this story. It was decently paced and thought out well enough, and there was just enough time put into Flutter's backstory without dragging it on so long that it detracted from the full story at hand. I also appreciate that the canon characters stayed, well, in character. You didn't turn them into your own perceptions or wishes of what they'd be, and because of that, it made the story believable. The one and only complaint I have with this story is the letter at the end. I'm fine with the idea of the letter itself, but for it to jump from her huge insecurity, to suddenly announcing that she's getting married was a little jarring. It just didn't quite add up right to me considering how even letting out the admission that she likes other mares nearly broke her in half mentally just a few sentences before. Instead, with the letter idea in mind, I would have taken the route of maybe she and her Mom finally making amends and restoring their lost/strained relationship, especially after the conversation they were bound to have had soon after she came out. But, that's just me. The story is yours, and you've clearly handled it well without anypony else's input to begin with. :twilightsmile: Also, I see what you did there with the hints in the letter at the end. Not of fan of the Flutterjack ship myself, but I appreciate how subtle you made it. And it's nice to see a written work that didn't cram their favorite ship, assuming that it is, down the reader's throat. It was really well handled for a story like this in my opinion. But seriously, all in all I'd give this amazing story a 9.9/10 and have most certainly added this to my favorites. Keep up the awesome work! :pinkiehappy:

Cute and I think something every gay/bi person can relate to

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