Tyler Reece, a Paleontologist, who has lived a rather boring life, fins the discovery of the century. An evolved Tyrannosaurus Rex. Larger, meaner, and more predatory. It dwarfs the previous incarnation, by becoming slightly larger than a Spinosaurus, and having the weight to match. Of course there was only so much to gauge from the bones, but of course, while Tyler is trying to bask in his short glory, he is taken to a far off world.
However, luckily for Tyler he's not defenseless, as he controls the body of the most powerful predator in that world: the world of Equus.
A world filled with colorful....talking ponies....who are herbivores....Yep....
Chapters (9)
Good story so far, can't wait for more!!!
Great idea for a story,
it just feels a little like a rough draft, do you plan on expanding your 'fast recap' paragraphs? The ponies seem to have some from the shows cannon (like AJ seeing a dinosaur wrecking her trees), and those brief summarized events could be expounded upon for great character development.Why my brain decided to skip the Author's note is a mystery.
Apparently I shouldn't write comments at 0600 when I first wake up. I'll wait for coffee next time.
That said, it's a fun story that's coming along well, I'm excited to see where you take it.
This is really, really, rushed. Everyone is acting out of character (especially Twilight) and the fact that you summed up twenty minutes of episode into...
...really shows how fast you wanted to get this out. The main protagonist just seems to be a self-insert wish-fulfilment power fantasy. Like, why couldn't he be a normal T-Rex? Those things are fucking terrifying enough. We don't need this 'evolved' bullshit. And it just had to be him who saved them from the manticore, because of course it was. Which doesn't even make sense, because then how did Fluttershy get the Element of Kindness to save Luna?
Long story short, this has the potential to be really interesting. I'd love to read about a human adapting to being in a mute body that he has very little control over, while the ponies' natural herbivorous instincts cause them to fear him. It would be great. Unfortunately, the execution is severely lacking.
I have to agree while rushed it is an interesting idea
7414986 Thanks for the input, but like I said, this is a side story/project thing I'm doing. I rushed the first two chapters to get it to it's original start. If this was the beginning I would've put more development into it, but like an intro they're short and get a relative message across.
Plus, who wants a regular T-rex in Equestria? Sure I could do that, but what's the point? Talking ponies aren't normal so why should a normal dinosaur be there? I mean that's just me. If people feel so strongly on it, I'll gladly change it to a normal rex, but it is effectively one, just slightly larger, and with a more ferocious look.
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7415498 The beginning of a story is supposed to draw the reader into it. If your beginning is half-assed then no one will want to read any further. Put a bit of effort into it, or don't even bother to begin with. As for your excuses about the 'evolved' shite, that still doesn't make any sense. Like, are you trying to imply that there actually are regular T-Rexes walking around Equestria? Cause I don't see any canon evidence for that. I also think your size descriptions are a bit off. Apparently the protagonist is bigger than an adult dragon. That's absolute bullshit and you know it. All the adult dragons we've seen in Equestria are mountain-sized.
Is this story in any way based off of Jurassic Park?
7415903 Ok, I understand your opinions, although let's just agree to disagree on some of those points, as we have differing views on what I said. About the Adult Dragons(and I actually have to check if I screwed it up) the character has never seen an adult dragon before. All dragons he has seen are probably teenagers, but nothing close to an elder, but he assumes, as most dragons in our media are not mountain sized. What I mean by him not seeing it is if in the first two, if I put that part in, I need to correct it, but if it's only in the third chapter, then it's completely fine. (First Person)
7415961 Well, not really. Jurassic park had dinosaurs and mutated ones, and this does too, so I suppose they are connected, but that's about it; the premise of dinosaurs.
If that were me, I would have just said fuck it and charged, and not wasted time thinking of the options. But hey, that's just me.
keep It up
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I like it. can't wait to find out how they treat the human turned super Tyrannous and if they keep in captivity. Keep up the good work on this story.
More?
These chapters, with their framework-feel, need some touching up. I understand you don't want to waste too much time on the intro, but you also risk losing viewers due to the jolting, discombobulated feeling of the first couple chapters. Would you be interested in someone helping you with some of the writing, perhaps?
7419029 I'm up. I'd always appreciate kind gestures.
I was going to rewrite them in the future, but well if someone would like to do it themselves...well it's up to them, just try not to change the original plot.
Really like the story so far I hope you keep working on it
7421550 I will, don't worry. I might end up having to put the other one on hold, considering its low popularity compared to this one. but either way, thanks for ya' comment.
Don't be ridiculous. You make the other one die to atone for attacking.
I like this fic. It's pretty good and gives a nice sense of power from the main character.
Oh, look, another Dumblestia! Who would've thought? Too dumb to notice the hydra corpses, too dumb to notice a lack of pony corpses, too dumb to realize she's trying to bring the law down on a being she believes to be non-sapient, too dumb to even bother asking what happened. Too dumb to wonder where its obviously claw/teeth/acid induced injuries came from....I could do this all day. The sad thing is that she probably would be like that in canon, too.
Still, at least the main character's usual fainting is for genuinely good reasons. Unlike most HiE fics.
I'm really liking this story so far
So he'll basically be the kingdom's guard dog.
Normally I wouldn't like the position of weakness that being a pet puts people in, but he's fuck mothering Giant T-rex, he can't really get humiliated.
7425032 Well, as in real life, politicians and people of power aren't the most intelligent. MLP is pretty much a derivative of monarchies. The nobles beck on people's backs, and complain of the littlest things, while the leaders may be kind, they don't always have the intelligence to know what's right.
I wasn't trying to make them too stupid, but make them keep appearances. Just like in real life, MLP has faults in their leaders.
(If you want truth, look to history, or look to today. But well, that's just me revelling in the disgust of today's leaders). Pay no mind if i insulted some people, it was just my opinion.
and thus Luna gained a means of transportation besides the chariot.
i wonder if there would be a spell or something that lets you fly,...
now this is going be fun to read
This turned akut awesome :) tha is by far my favorite story in a loooong time keep doing what you doing beacuse it's working!
Awesome, keep er goin
Cute.
so...she doesnt know you are sapient?
How the hell does a T-Rex sit down?
I raallyyyy love this story just a question tho how does this rex look like? Justa bigger rex or what? Personelly i think it looks like a hyper rex from the isle seach it up it fits perfect a giant rex with armored plates
7437917 its more of a crouch, kinda like a dog laying down on its belly
Great story, i really like it
Good chapter can't wait for more
Im honestly more surprised about how calm he is after being told he is going to become someones pet (a pet that will most likely be treated well by a very powerful being and such but a pet none-the-less). Even if he had forgot most about being his old self, one would think that becoming a pet would be a disconcerting situation for any sentient being (even the more primal part of him would most likely not like being contained). Those are just my thoughts but either way, this story is interesting to read and i cant wait to see what lies ahead.
The main characters attitude and mindset completely boggles my mind for how he is acting/thinking but its cute/funny so I will keep reading. Keep up the good work.
a wound has been struck to this story and it is starting to bleed the author must put a bandage upon it else it may bleed out and die
Ok, seems promising
Celestia... this is why i hate you.
I would be okay with becoming a pet and have my freedom taken away from me, i have reasons for this but i won't say to keep this short. Some people think differently america!
7533440 #StalinReturns
Awesome, looking forward for you're next update!
good job
Archaeology?
In this case it would be paleontology, the study of studying extinct creatures, archaeology is about old human stuff, for example, pyramids are archaeology, while non-avian dinosaurs are all paleontology.
You have my seal of appROARval.
CMOOOOOOON man i need more XD pls?
A friendly predator? Bruh, there is no such thing. If it can eat you, it will.
7416451 I would have weighed my options and I think that was the logical thing to do. It was 3 hydras. Not 3 hydra heads, 3 separate hydras. Our protagonist may be an apex predator, but he is not invincible.