I'm starting to notice a pattern in who the main characters are in the stories I upload.
Rainbow Dash helps Pinkie pick up the pieces after devastation, eventually leading to confusing thoughts about the cyan mare running through the pink pony's crazy mind.
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Dude, keep it up. You're definitely good enough.
I like this! Nice, short, digestible chapter with multiple cliffhangers and questions already! Although I suppose I am inclined to like this - Pinkie is my favourite pony and her and Rainbow are my favourite pairing, shipped and otherwise!
Can't wait to see more!
55540 I was supposed to write this on chapter 1...
I'm interested to see where this goes
Its a good story. Love the description of the characters and their thoughts. You are definitely not wasting your time writing this story.
This could prove interesting I will track until I can make a clear judgement and then rate!
55431 56907 Many thanks, I shall keep at it for a while then.
55540 They are my favourite also, which I suppose is the reason they were the first thing that came to my head when I thought of having a practice run at writing a fic.
Originally I planned to make this just friendshipping, but with the way I want the story to go, that wouldn't really make much sense. Hopefully I can pull off shipping, otherwise I'm just writing myself into a corner.
56546 As this is my first fic, I've made it to be a sort of practice run, as I mentioned above. As such, its not going to be amazing or anything, but I hope it can at least be interesting. If its successful, then hopefully I can put other ideas I have into use.
Im pretty sure pinkie is the only pony who can store that much energy without exploding
hey, I like it!
I really do quite like this so far.
I'm enjoying the building tension as I wait for something *pause for dramatic effect* DRAMATIC TO HAPPEN!
Do keep at it, I'd really love to see how it turns out.
I really enjoyed your stupidly short and bad chapter.
That sounded better in my head... 
113763 Well if someone enjoyed it I'm a bit happy, but I still don't like it much. Hopefully the next chapter will be less cheesy.
No matter, she had tenacity (that new word Twilight had taught her that she used whenever she could), at least when it came to the Wonderbolts.
Ha! I really like the idea of Rainbow using a new word she's learned as much as possible. I don't know why, but I think it's very cute, and it feels in character.
I don't think this is that cheesy, for whatever it's worth. And I loved the last sentence--great way to create a sense of foreboding.
Also, this chapter had this lovely and original bit of Rainbow Pie ness:
She enjoyed Rainbow’s hug the most. She always did. She didn’t know why; perhaps the cyan pegasus simply had a more comfortable hug or a more cuddly body. Not that she would ever tell her that of course – she knew the tough flier would most likely hate being thought of as cuddly.
Pinkie actually disliked the fact that she enjoyed one of her friend’s hugs more than the rest; she had the five best friends anypony could possibly hope to have in all of Equestria and she treasured them all equally and dearly. She wasn’t meant to have favourites – she didn’t have favourites. She enjoyed each and every hug they gave her; it didn’t matter who was giving the hug as she loved them all.
She just loved Rainbow’s hugs a little bit more.
I'm not sure I've ever seen a writer suggest that Pinkie would feel this way but, now that I've read this, I can't see Pinkie as feeling anything BUT this way. Of course she'd feel guilty about having a "favorite" hug, especially if she didn't yet understand WHY she liked RD's hugs best. This is a lovely character moment, and adorable to boot.
I hope you do decide to continue this story, as I'm interested to see how things go. It's got a good sense of pacing, and the first chapter was a nice attention-grabber. But I do understand not wanting to finish a story you don't much enjoy writing--been there myself.
136155 Many thanks for the feedback
I will continue this story, as I hate to leave something unfinished, but it will most likely take quite a while for it to be finished. I started this as an experiment - having no writing experience before, I wanted to see if I could take a not particularly imaginative storyline and make it interesting to read. The problem I've gained from this is that while I know how I want the story to go and have a few scenes in my head that I want to write, I'm having trouble lengthening out the space between them. I know what I want to write in chapter 5, but I'm still figuring out where exactly I want to go with chapter 4, for example.
I will get there eventually though.
137352
No pressure, and no rush! Just wanted to mention that I'm enjoying the story.
And I feel you on the problem you're having. Been there, been there, been there.
This is and awesome story, and I love your writing style and all... but you've never gone pranking?!?!!!
Not even one o' them cheesy pizza calls?!.......
309951 I'm English, I can't even say I've ever heard someone say the word 'prank' over here. Don't think I've ever said it out loud either, only ever typed it.
And I think the first time I typed it was this story.
So yeah, no pranking
Hope you make another chapter soon!
542365 I recently - and relucatantly - recently started rewriting what I had originally written for the next chapter ages ago. However, I'm very busy at the moment, and am also hopping between writing/updating four or five different stories too, so don't expect anything too soon. I'll do my best though; I've been putting off writing more of this story for ages as I dislike it so.