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So far very good story.
well the great kahn started with next to nothing, so lets see where this goes.
Ok, I have to admit that I love this story.
The fact that the main character reacts like a normal person when faced with an alien world and first contact with the Zebras, is really refreshing. Way, way, way, way, way to many stories have the main character go absolutely bat shit, to the point of pissing themselves in abject terror on first contact. First contact with tiny, pastel colored ponies with technicolor hair, the size of a golden retriever. (Yeah, frightening I know)
Second, This is well written. I was worried that my screen reader would mangle the names and make listening to this story painful/irritating, but Apples Text to Speech didn't seem to mangle any of them. According to my wife, My Mac is fairly close to the text. I think thats pretty cool.
The writing itself is above par, I didn't catch any typos on listening to it, and the story has good flow and pacing.
Great Job, Im going to be following this.
The Monk
Its been a good read so far, can't wait for the next installment!
It's funny how you had a note at the beginning not to try to pronounce the names and places with English annunciation, yet just about everything we've come across so far is pronounced exactly as it should be in English. Anyone who gets those wrong isn't doing swahili or Arabic wrong, they're doing basic reading wrong.
Forgot about him getting sun poisoning. The joy of blisters and nausea.
the characters personality seems stoic so far, a bit similar to Drizzt Du'urden. i wonder how well he fairs in a high tension situation.
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I wrote a lawful evil character (Valkardian) in Underworld, wanted to go the other way this time.
I like Asha, I'm guessing she's gonna be the love intrest?
When he was describing what he considers a 'harpy', he's actually describing 99.98% of all females.
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[toxic incel intensifies]
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If we're bring honest, your target probably hasn't experienced too much of life to make a proper assessment, and you yourself most likely has no idea what the word 'incel' means.
Is he 31 or she 31