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Wonder if Verik joins a merc band or starts his own. He might not be strongest, but he's definitely smarter than the average sellsword. This is a great series and you have me hooked. I wonder if he takes his inspiration from Machiavelli of Tsun Tzu.
Another good chapter.
But why do I feel that going here is a very big mistake for our brave farmers? This city has my doggy sense tingling.
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Have to wait and see.
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Trying not to rush the story so answering that one will be a long way off for the time being, hope to build the world and characters more before diving headfirst into what causes the Warlord to begin its emergence in him.
This seems like a good story but it suffers from alot of minor mistakes. Mainly there is alot of repetition, sometimes in the same sentance. I also found alot of run on sentances every few paragraphs and there are a few just straight up bad sentances that should have been caught in editing. Like this one.
"Approaching the city late that morning was a small task as the trail they followed did not line up with any roads resulting in several turns and struggles over less even and rocky bits of terrain as they wound their way around the outermost part of the slums that ringed the cities exterior."
Its massively long but that wouldnt be bad, but there is not a single one of these in there , <-. Plus "less even and rocky" doesnt make a hot lick of sense.
Also you use the word loose instead of lose alot. I stopped counting after 6. To reiterate. Loose means something doesnt quite fit as in it fit loosely around the boy's waist. While lose, means you did not win.