What would you do if because of one mistake, you find yourself unsure of what to do?
Follow Skyshine as she experiences this and with the help of friends. She will overcome this, and help the pony she carries to shape the world one day
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Things I liked. It was a solid, well presented piece, with grammar and spellings all correct, a rare treat on this site.
Things I didn't like so much. Why was Cadance there? Never really explained.
Also, and this bothered me a little, in just 1.6k words, we aren't given an insight into Sky and Ink's relationship. It's not delved into any further than she's nervous and he's an asshole. Why is he an asshole? Has he had a bad day at work? Is he angry at something? We don't know. He just goes from zero to 11 at Sky, like he's an ass for the sake of being an ass.
Which is fine, we the readers don't get to see the quality of the relationship though, so it's hard to sympathise and empathise, other than, have a hug, he's a douche.
Apart from that, as I say in my opinion it's a decent chapter, could've been twice as long though.
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Ty for the help bro. I am keeping htat in mind when I write the next chapters.