I think you might be going a little too fast here. It might have been better to have shown her slowly losing it in a few chapters rather than just jumping her into the insanity. If I recall two face(before he became two face) was actually a really great person who just lost it eventually because of his injury. This kind of thing doesn't happen right away. If you slow down a little bit, I think this story could be pretty good.
10305898 I added this to my tracking, but won't start reading this till I'm recovered so I can remember everything. Also, I was thinking of doing a story review of The mare who laughs once I'm done editing it. It's basically gonna be a cinema sins/wins combo noting the different things I loved and hated about the story. Tell me what you think.
That picture is of twilight not rarity.
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I know, I couldn't find a picture of a two-faced Rarity and have zero photoshop skills.
left will take her to Manehattan, to the left will take her Las Pegasus
Where is the right there is no right in this there's only left
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Thanks for noting the typo, I will fix it now.
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You can't go wrong without your right Love the story though
Nice
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Thanks
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Thank you.
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Np
I think you might be going a little too fast here. It might have been better to have shown her slowly losing it in a few chapters rather than just jumping her into the insanity. If I recall two face(before he became two face) was actually a really great person who just lost it eventually because of his injury. This kind of thing doesn't happen right away. If you slow down a little bit, I think this story could be pretty good.
10305898
I added this to my tracking, but won't start reading this till I'm recovered so I can remember everything. Also, I was thinking of doing a story review of The mare who laughs once I'm done editing it. It's basically gonna be a cinema sins/wins combo noting the different things I loved and hated about the story. Tell me what you think.
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Fair criticism.
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Look forward to it.