THIS IS A RE-WRITE OF MY OTHER STORY UNDER THE SAME TITLE
Instead of fleeing to the human realm, Sunset decides to talk to Celestia, thus causing her to stay in Equestria. As she continues her studies, Celestia gets a new student.
The young purple prodigy, Twilight Sparkle!
Celestia tasks her with something she is not too keen about: taking care of Twilight. All Sunset wants to do is study magic with Celestia, so why does she have to do something so annoying? However, Sunset will soon learn that life isn't just all about magic and learning.
Rated "Teen" because of themes, language, and a bit of violence. Sex tag because of raunchy/steamy innuendos. Violence tag because of light descriptions of violence and injuries.
Chapters (3)
So comparing this story to the previous incarnation, what parts of the story do you plan to keep? Are the school duels going to stay?
This re-write chapter is great, I LIKE IT! I'm giving you six stars for doing a good job. ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐
Hope to see more of your re-write chapters and remember: Believe in yourself, take on your challenges, and dig deep within yourself to conquer fears. Never let anyone bring you down. You got to keep going. Here's a song that will make you unstoppable. Enjoy! https://youtu.be/h3h035Eyz5A
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The duels were one of my favorite things to write, so I do plan to add them back eventually! Hopefully I’ll be able to hash them out a bit more, expanding on the merits and social consequences it could have. I also plan to add some an actual conflict (slowly building up to it of course!) while still keeping some chapters a little more light hearted.
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I’m glad you’re enjoying it so far.
Thank you very much!
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You're welcome
Is Spike going to be in this re-written version?
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Can’t forget our favorite dragon! 
Yes of course!
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Yay
I dunno if I just missed it or something, but just curious as to why the rewrite?
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Neeevermind. It was at the *bottom* of the first part. Kinda was looking for a blog or for it at the top. My bad.
I did enjoy these two chapters! I do remember trying to read the original but stopping bc of the bad grammar mistakes, and I'm glad to see a lot more polish on the rewrite. The story itself definitely seems like it's going to be interesting.
Ordinarily, I'd leave a critique about how short this chapter is. In this case it did exactly what it needed to do.
The pacing didn't feel abrupt either, so well done on that.
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That’s something I wanted to fix here, so I’ll be trying my best to catch all of them!
Haha there were a lot of grammar mistakes in the old one
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Glad to hear it! I really want to work on pacing because it was something I struggled with, so hopefully I can keep it up.
I'm pretty sure you mean hoof here.
Whew, the adorbs are strong with tis story. My Hnnnng will probably escape at high velocity at some point while reading this.
🥰
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So far, so good. I do hear you on the pacing issue too. I've struggled with that myself.
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I was going through again and fixed it a few moments before reading your comment. I plan to have a decent amount of cute moments so better be prepared!
Haha yeah I did
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I figured there was more cute on that way so I am ready. It's one of the main reasons I came to this story in the first place.
Ahh making Twilight leagues stronger than Sunset are we? That's going to be a big hurdle for Sunny to overcome, she's been the smartest and strongest unicorn for all her life. Meeting a stronger Unicorn that is just a kid? Major ego blow. Also yea the "Watching Twilight causally cause mass destruction" thing is scary, though expected when you use the "Twilight Sparkle is OP" trope. Also keep in mind my pointing out your using a trope is not a criticism, tropes are tools for story telling and "OP character" is a good one when used right and so far your doing that.
Interesting change of direction. Although I am concerned about the early reveal of Luna. How will this affect her fated return to equestria, will Sunset become an element, what will happen with Twilight's letter to Celestia etc. Good luck figuring out those answers 'cause I don't even know where I'd start.
okay, i was really surprised and confused by the cancelation
lovely, i am surprised Twilight didn't break a sweat from this
lovely ending! I wonder, could you imagine Twilight or Sunset meeting an earth pony or pegasus here?
Jump slightly, you really don't need the word up here.
And there was yet more cuteness, as advertised.
That was a good story goodluck with the rest of it.
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Meeting some of the main 6 is even possible. All have reasons they could show up in Canterlot and in the show Celestia was keeping tabs on them, she could arrange reasons.
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maybe
Just found this story. Has me hooked. Looking forward to reading more.
Any update ?
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Writer hasn't been on the site for 8 months. At this point we may have to consider the story abandoned.
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Shame, i realy liked the story